Goodbye To The Old Me

[Dead Silence]

this is a track i did about an hour ago.
i was listening to my old shit and i just got in the mood
so i hopped on the laptop looked at beats and i just got this

the concept is me leaving my oldself behind. all of the shit that i put my shit myself thru. it was like i had an alter ego in a sense. and im destroying myself like all the bad stuff. i dk its weirrd so it may not make sense to you guys which i really dont care.

everytime that i woke up//
i dreamt that i just spoke up//
and told the world what i really feel//
than all of my scars would be healed//
i wonder when it will be my day//
to show everyone what ive been meaning to say//
unravel this twine that clogs up my dome//
sittin in a full house and i still feel so alone//
this shit just never seems to fall into place//
because it seems like its never going to change pace//
so i start marching to the beat of my own drum//
when everyone else is a peach im the plum//
i'm different from all others that you see//
because you just do you and i just do me//
when you start to give im going to take//
and when you fold i'll make sure that i raise the stakes//


i feel like i just gotta give up//
this life i live is just so fucked//
no matter how i give its never enough//
so i decided to repo all of my stuff//
and turn my back on this whole world//
with my head held high with my girl//
escape into the darkness and never see light//
because it nothing will ever again be right//
i gave it my all and im saying fuck this fight//
its not worth crying over every night//
this is just something not worth dieing for//
im deciding to end this pointless war//
whats the purpose of fighting yourself//
i feel real nervous but i dont need your help//
this is a battle that ill finish on my own//
its time to destroy this evil clone//

its time that i took over my own body//
you never did control me you just taught me//
on how to fight the demons in my life//
you told me that you were the demon right?//
well i found your true identity and its not what you told me//
you were just a mere man who thought u could control me,own me//
never that,and i never said i would take you back//
you broke a colorful friendship but now is black//
all you did was put me down and than you threw it in my face//
well i will never drown because i just found my own little place//
its time for me to start living happy//
its time for me to whiteout this black me//
right now is where i start living out my real I.D.//
so i guess this is so long and good bye to the old me//

[Lawgix]

ummmmm well the lyrics were pretty dope... concept was dope... instrumental was pimp cause i got the same one lol... ummm honestly the song was okay... but theres no real flow i don't feel emotion theres really nothin here to feel honestly... u still haven't found a swag where u can ride the beat i don't think ur puttin ur full potential into findin ur swag... but i mean it was better than what i've heard from the past atleast u didn't drag ur verse out in front of the hook ya know? over all man i'll give this an 5/10 the 5 is for the dope concept lyrics and beat... but ya swag needs to be improved alot...

[MOEstradamus]

i heard some mess ups that you filled in words or put in words that you didn't type but that comes natural i do it when i drop i feel the same way that lawgix feels i mean you gotta put emotion in it dude on the real you lyrics and beat was cool but dude your puttin me to sleep man but good shit anyway dude

[Dead Silence]

thanks. well like ive said before im doing it outta interest like im just doing it to get my thoughts out not.

but thanks for the feed man and im glad u liked the concept of it

thanks

uppin

[-MenaCe-]

Dead this could be real hot you just need a shit load more of emotion i mean get angry or sumthin and you'll be iight...

As a matter of fact i would like to hear you re do this track but with more emotion and speak up more cause its really not that bad...

[Dead Silence]

well ill try im never home alone i did thatat like 1 in the morning so it was kinda watever

[-MenaCe-]

^^ I Hear ya

But just get that new one asap

[Deciple]

I Do like the lyrics and the story but the vocals and delivery are just dead man. Your vocals match your name. but like lawgix was saying everything is else is good. i also have this beat. I dont think the lyrics really go with the prehook on it tho. The prehook sounds like you should be telling your story to an individual or like a girl or something. not a story of your oldself.. imma give this a 5/10

[Viral]

still the same ole dead silence i remember...lol....good to see ur still doin shit to do shit...