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Yblem - Concrete Jungle

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Hey.

I just made a new song called Concrete Jungle. Im happy with the outcome, but would welcome any feedback, negative or positive.

Im also from norway, so my accent aint flawless, but its gettin better.

Heres the song: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_so ... ID=7911274


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its a cool song man... beats pretty dope... can't really hear the lyrics beats a lil too loud... hooks pretty sick... the fast rappin on the second verse was cool too... quality is good... good shit man i liked it... i'll give it a 7.5/10 man keep up the good work man...
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catchy song. vocals are a bit loud cant really hear the lyrics.. jsut some here adn there.. the fast was tight. kinda wanted more.. im into that fast rap. over all its good. you came with good delivery and flow also.. nice work
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thanks, I fixed the beat tho. It sounds better now, thanks for noticing.

Hehe, I got tired of fastflow rap for about a year ago. I always used to rap fast, but its cool to mix it up a bit. But im glad yall liked it!

Im puttin up a new song featuring a friend of mine soon.

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make sure u post it up on here man!
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u Have The Same Rappers Poster as Me Lol. The Name Of The Track Sounded a Bit Cliche To Me But The Track itself Was One Of The Best ive Heard On Here, One Of The More Professional Drops Far as Presence And Swagger Go. id Say Keep The Little Twang u Got On ur Accent And Make it ur Style. Hook Was Smooth And Even Though The Lyrics Weren't The Best ive Ever Heard The Track as a Whole Works Well, The Fast Rap Was Pretty Good Too Keep it Up.
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shits dope man....i noticed a very little accent but not much at all...ur vocals were good n ur flow was on point i didnt listen to it all cuz i gotta get goin...but yeah keep up the good work man
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Scotch Hall:

I can agree on the title, but the riddims name on the title was concrete jungle, so I just freestyled the hook, and concrete jungle got brought up naturally, its a bit of a cliche, but I think its allright.

Im flattered with you sayin its one of the best songs you have heard on here for a while! My accent has a reggaeton feelin to it, so it dont really matters if my accent aint flawless, thats what Ive been thinkin anyway..hehe.. Thanks for the feedback guy!

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Thanks for listenin to it, I hope you get chance to listen to it fully tho. But im glad the first impression got you!
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