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Stupid Cards..

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No Time to Be Stuck in The Past
I Move With The Future Like Newest Computaz
You Played Me i Knew It Loser
Its Over Jack Like No More Abusive Rumors
My Blood Bubbles Like Producin Tumors
Most Cats r Filled With Shit Like Sewege Consumers
I Dont Get Love, Endorsed Or Literally
A Red Hearts Kitty Liter To Me
Cupid Shivers n Plees Sayin My Insides Are Rotten
Like a Liver Disease..Still i Deliva A Breeze
Knowin I'ma Win..Smokin Budd Drinkin Heinikins
I'm Pumpin My Chest Up Like The Himlic Spin
Cus Low Guys R Out Around The Highest Inn's
Riotin..Kick In ya Door Like "Hoe Tell Or i'll
PIOLET SIN"..I Been in Such a Damn Rush To Man Up
I Forgot Who i Cant N Can Trust
Like Tin Around Faith..Sounds Great Till Someone
Opened It N Found Hate..
What U See N Know Are 2 Different Things
Soon After Both Have "Lost Value" Like a Missing Ring
See Seein Blinds you From Sun light
But What u'll Discover N Know One Night
Is U've Become a Star That's Dumb Bright..
Thinkin About Knowledge In a Hot Breeze
Dealing With College & Colleagez All Polished Up
N Ready To Be Shelf'd Ta The World..
Wait You Put ya Self in ya Girl..
9 Month's Later During Conception It Curls
Tubes Tied Around..U Made Her Water Drop
So U Got Fired Down..To Ashes..Useliss
A Addict askin For Matches To Use Quick
Just Another Average Abused Kid
Girl A Dozen Nights i Told U The Kid Wasnt Right
U Had Love In Site,
But Happened 2 a 17 Year Old Lovin Life?
Girl You Know Who yooou Are
U Don't Get a Second Shot in This Useliss Bar
We Call Life..U Can Kick your Stupid Cards...
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Re: Stupid Cards..

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nice drop keep dem coming loved the end man another real drop from you
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Re: Stupid Cards..

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$.@MB!T!0N.$ wrote:
No Time to Be Stuck in The Past
I Move With The Future Like Newest Computaz

Nice, dope line.

You Played Me i Knew It Loser
Its Over Jack Like No More Abusive Rumors

Alright.

My Blood Bubbles Like Producin Tumors
Most Cats r Filled With Shit Like Sewege Consumers

I really don't know what sewage consumers are.

I Dont Get Love, Endorsed Or Literally
A Red Hearts Kitty Liter To Me

Nope.

Cupid Shivers n Plees Sayin My Insides Are Rotten
Like a Liver Disease..Still i Deliva A Breeze

I like the first line, more than the second.

Knowin I'ma Win..Smokin Budd Drinkin Heinikins
I'm Pumpin My Chest Up Like The Himlic Spin

No idea what this is.

Cus Low Guys R Out Around The Highest Inn's
Riotin..Kick In ya Door Like "Hoe Tell Or i'll
PIOLET SIN"..I Been in Such a Damn Rush To Man Up
I Forgot Who i Cant N Can Trust

I'm not feeling this either.

Like Tin Around Faith..Sounds Great Till Someone
Opened It N Found Hate..

This could have been dope.

What U See N Know Are 2 Different Things
Soon After Both Have "Lost Value" Like a Missing Ring

I like this line.

See Seein Blinds you From Sun light
But What u'll Discover N Know One Night
Is U've Become a Star That's Dumb Bright..

I know where you were going with this, its like that cassidy line, that I thought was horrible.

Thinkin About Knowledge In a Hot Breeze
Dealing With College & Colleagez All Polished Up

Ill. I like that flow.

N Ready To Be Shelf'd Ta The World..
Wait You Put ya Self in ya Girl..

No.

9 Month's Later During Conception It Curls
Tubes Tied Around..U Made Her Water Drop
So U Got Fired Down..To Ashes..Useliss
A Addict askin For Matches To Use Quick
Just Another Average Abused Kid

Right.

Girl A Dozen Nights i Told U The Kid Wasnt Right
U Had Love In Site,
But Happened 2 a 17 Year Old Lovin Life?
Girl You Know Who yooou Are
U Don't Get a Second Shot in This Useliss Bar
We Call Life..U Can Kick your Stupid Cards...

Nice.
You stayed on topic, pretty good, I just found too many lines nonsensical at least to me. You know, I have been giving you a lot of good feedback lately, you have came along way, sometimes you still drop pieces that I don't entirely feel, this being one.

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Re: Stupid Cards..

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Thats Fair.. I Appreciate The Feed Plex.. Thank you
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