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Your friends keep sayin that it seems we aint right
because we scream and we fight almost each every night
but once i calm you down and i reach for the light
we just freak in the sheets and my speed is precise
got you switchin positions while im lickin and hittin
go from the living room to some dick in the kitchen
yea the stove to the floor or bend you over the droors
i beat it up hard but leave you hopein' for more
and if i dont spend the night, we on the phone til like four
says shes grown and mature right before she throws a tantrum
starts blowin up my phone ringtones like an anthem
our worlds are apart, i tryed goin but i cant run
this girls got my heart and shes holdin it for ransom
i dont know if its right, what i would call true love
cuz i love you to death but you talk too much
so i cant make a choice and its all screwed up
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JHaze wrote:Your friends keep sayin that it seems we aint right
because we scream and we fight almost each every night
but once i calm you down and i reach for the light
we just freak in the sheets and my speed is precise
got you switchin positions while im lickin and hittin
go from the living room to some dick in the kitchen
yea the stove to the floor or bend you over the droors
i beat it up hard but leave you hopein' for more
and if i dont spend the night, we on the phone til like four
says shes grown and mature right before she throws a tantrum
starts blowin up my phone ringtones like an anthem
our worlds are apart, i tryed goin but i cant run
this girls got my heart and shes holdin it for ransom
i dont know if its right, what i would call true love
cuz i love you to death but you talk too much
so i cant make a choice and its all screwed up
This was quite superficial, lacked any humor. Might work for a club song, not a very entertaining freestyle. No hate, I've read some of your drops before and you definitely have talent. I don't misjudge a key/freestyle for a written piece either. But I didn't get any enjoyment out of reading this.

The first half was better from a lyrical stand point.
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