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The Obvious Trap

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My priorities, love is considered second handed
Some demand it, for me, it's the legend of Atlantis
Castles crumble, due to misleading sacrifices
Some life it, the fuel to drive without a license
Due to complications, never really made the notion
Ask logic for advice, never act on pure emotion
I’m through with it, it’ll surely never rule a bit
Life’s hard, what the fuck does love have to do with shit?
A similar concept with religion and paranoia
False sense of motivation, no self expression’ll destroy ya
Be free, evade it, and the concept of I complete me’s created
Otherwise, having no power’s appreciated
Don’t fall into the trap called love, you see their fate?
No self-dependence is usually a female’s trait
It’s no bad personal experience that motivates me
It’s just a level of understanding I’m used to knowing lately.
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Re: The Obvious Trap

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The obvious trap from MASS EFFEKT
Mass Effekt wrote:My priorities, love is considered second handed
Some demand it, for me, it's the legend of Atlantis

Alright.

Castles crumble, due to misleading sacrifices
Some life it, the fuel to drive without a license

Nice play on words.

Due to complications, never really made the notion
Ask logic for advice, never act on pure emotion

Alright.

I’m through with it, it’ll surely never rule a bit
Life’s hard, what the fuck does love have to do with shit?

Ha. Nice.

A similar concept with religion and paranoia
False sense of motivation, no self expression’ll destroy ya

Ok.

Be free, evade it, and the concept of I complete me’s created
Otherwise, having no power’s appreciated

Makes sense.

Don’t fall into the trap called love, you see their fate?
No self-dependence is usually a female’s trait

I don't agree.

It’s no bad personal experience that motivates me
It’s just a level of understanding I’m used to knowing lately.

I like.
Good drop man. The rhymes were pretty solid. The wordplay was there, the concepts were descriptive.

The only reservations that I could possibly have is the lack of experimentation. Seems like you were quite preserved in your approach.

Your thoughts were extremely clear, the message came across simply. I can't complain too much.

Nice one! 7.9
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