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All of these digits and salaries dropped on lottery tickets/
Poverty stricken, gotta keep wishin and plot to see riches/
Walkin these ditches, posted with thumbs in the air/
Hitchhikin this road to success hopin someone will care/
A bum in despair, even plumbers can cherish the pipe dream/
But the barrier height isn't as fair as it might seem/
Its very enticing, but their minds and hope is scattered/
Spine too broke and battered to be climbin social ladders/
Tried to cope with matters despite this whole disaster/
When their pride is low, they disguise and cloak the factors/
But they can't hide the holes and cracks of their misguided approach/
I don't try to impose, just showin who provided the rope/
Who's settin the traps for these obsessions with cash/
People investin their stash, throwin their checks in the trash/
Never acceptin the facts or witnessing the twisted distortion/
But get a kick of endorphins thinking they hold their ticket to fortune/
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Post by -MenaCe- »

Nice Drop Ruck..Im feelin the whole thing ya wordplay is sick the way everything just falls into place is great..Good Shit
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I was gonna try and pick out my favorite lines, but after reading it multiple times I can't decide because the whole thing is dope. I'd like to offer some constructive criticism but the only advice I can give is to keep droppin cuz I'll keep reading.
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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A bum in despair, even plumbers can cherish the pipe dream/
But the barrier height isn't as fair as it might seem/
^^^^This was nice

I'm liking errything you drop you always come with somethin' that makes sense to people, and you keep bringing that truth, keep writing my dude!
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Post by complexity »

Ruckus wrote:Scratch

All of these digits and salaries dropped on lottery tickets/
Poverty stricken, gotta keep wishin and plot to see riches/
Walkin these ditches, posted with thumbs in the air/
Hitchhikin this road to success hopin someone will care/

I love this concept, I don't care how much it is used.


A bum in despair, even plumbers can cherish the pipe dream/
But the barrier height isn't as fair as it might seem/

Oh. That was some slick wordplay in the first bar.

Its very enticing, but their minds and hope is scattered/
Spine too broke and battered to be climbin social ladders/

Beautiful punchline.

Tried to cope with matters despite this whole disaster/
When their pride is low, they disguise and cloak the factors/
But they can't hide the holes and cracks of their misguided approach/
I don't try to impose, just showin who provided the rope/

Pretty good. Something seems to be missing, it surely isn't the flow.

Who's settin the traps for these obsessions with cash/
People investin their stash, throwin their checks in the trash/

Oh. Sick.

Never acceptin the facts or witnessing the twisted distortion/
But get a kick of endorphins thinking they hold their ticket to fortune/

Alright.
Simple complexity may be an oxymoron, but it perfectly describes your style.

I'll bet it took me longer to leave feedback on this piece than it did you to write it, yet I marvel at how fluid and completed it feels as with all your other pieces.
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Post by Riggz »

And see thats the thing about Ruckus.. he's word play is like freakin' second nature to him... I mean muthafukas just need to recognize talent. You can't "develop" talent.. its just fukin there or its not. Most cats here have skillz.. but Ruckus and Plex just have mad talent for this word play shit. I mean, when you can actually flow outloud to someone elses writtens... you can't help but to give it praise!

"A bum in despair, even plumbers can cherish the pipe dream/
But the barrier height isn't as fair as it might seem/"
^^^^ who the fuk thinks of shit like that????
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Post by EvilJoey »

Fire.. like always ...

I liked ur silly post more... but thats cuz its more mys tyle of shit lol...


Liked that beat u posted too..
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All of these digits and salaries dropped on lottery tickets/
Poverty stricken, gotta keep wishin and plot to see riches/
Walkin these ditches, posted with thumbs in the air/
Hitchhikin this road to success hopin someone will care/
A bum in despair, even plumbers can cherish the pipe dream/
But the barrier height isn't as fair as it might seem/
multis and flow was tight here old topic but was still good the final bar in this part was the best one startin out strong
Its very enticing, but their minds and hope is scattered/
Spine too broke and battered to be climbin social ladders/
Tried to cope with matters despite this whole disaster/
When their pride is low, they disguise and cloak the factors/
But they can't hide the holes and cracks of their misguided approach/
I don't try to impose, just showin who provided the rope/
again flow was on point multis nice started kickin up on the wordplay and complexity of this piece liked the first bar here was sick....
Who's settin the traps for these obsessions with cash/
People investin their stash, throwin their checks in the trash/
Never acceptin the facts or witnessing the twisted distortion/
But get a kick of endorphins thinking they hold their ticket to fortune/
finished strong flow was there loved the material of this whole piece just a good read alround started and ended strong but id have to say that middle part was my favorite part of the piece keep it up bro i cant say im surprised by how good it is thought it seems you drop constantly at this level bro
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