Joey Piff vs Shiobock(Joey Piff wins by KO)

[Frank Black]

5 Bars
Due Tuesday 12:00pm Est.
3-0 Ko
4-1 Tko.
Lets Get it.

[Shiobock]

check..

-- Tue Dec 15, 2009 10:25 am --

consider yourself lucky for earnin a shot,i aint concerned with this cock, saw your picture and my stomach started turnin a lot
if i looked like you i`d also refer to myself in the third person a lot!

its worse than i thought, if you think you gonna get signed you dim!
we KNOW joey cant make it on his own, like the guy from friends!

you`l be gone in a count from 5 to ten!, i spit fluent and dope flows
leaving joey a "no body" like the dude in ya logo

and YOU is a homo, pic look like he got the sourest taste of trout
with your ugly ass face even the tide wouldnt take you out

so face it now, this queers sloppy i`l slice open ya eyes and rip off ya ears papi!
give you a taste of a sword slame your face through the door and scream, HEEEEERRESS JOHNNIE!!


expos (if needed)
due talks about himself in third person, "joey piff did this joey piff did that"

his real names johnnie, for last bar..

[Frank Black]

my real name is sean buh cool. jonnie lynch is anotha rap alias cool verse tho ma dude.

-- 15 Dec 2009 18:15 --

lol nice verse i guess

He'll never elevate to bold scripts good ol' Shiobock stay on the same ol' shit
some cats just cant be helped, I tried to lend em a hand and this faggot tried to hold it (Fukin Homo)
Your a writers block pest warning shots failed like they wernt cocked yet
you'll never be a top vet if you stay droppin keys as an excuse like failed locksmiths! (lol)
& With A Face Like His, When It Comes To Gettin Pussy, Im Certain This Male Isnt
Because He's Been Shot Down By So Many Girls Half Of Earths Population Is Servin A Jail Sentence
And I peep Ya style and if ya don't change it up ur gonna look like An Ovarie
Cuz like Future dating online'With every name U break down' Horribly (u suck)

Closing Bar.
I'll Win This Easy If Not Voters Should Be Plowed With Dispute
He Going Down Its The Truth Cause He Doesnt Have No Chants Like A Excited Crowd Full Of Mutes

dont understand something dont vote.

[Riggz]

Fav line for Shiobuck "its worse than i thought, if you think you gonna get signed you dim!
we KNOW joey cant make it on his own, like the guy from friends!" -- bout the only line that had some umph to it Shi.

Joey... I'm old dude.. you gotta change your font back to 11 or 14 or somethin'...

Fav line for Joey "Your a writers block pest warning shots failed like they wernt cocked yet
you'll never be a top vet if you stay droppin keys as an excuse like failed locksmiths! (lol)"

Joey, you stretched a few bars.. but you took this IMO. Shi.. I think you got something in your tank... I wouldn't underestimate you. From the looks of it, you just didn't give it your all. But we all fall short at times when the hearts not into it.

vote-Joey

[Frank Black]

^ lol ighh imma fix it now

1-0 joey bump!

[Absolute]

Shi, I liked you "joey from friends" line, and the tide line, you have good transitions from bar to bar, so its alot of potential there. Just need to make your metaphors and overall scheme more complex. had this been a freestyle battle IRL, im sure you wouldve got ooh and ahs, simply because you stayed on target and alot of battle rappers tend not to. but the basics dont cut it online, elevation is definitely necessary, but you have a good foundation to build off of it looks like.
Joey, gotta agree with riggz, nigga im 19 and had trouble reading it, lol, but it was enjoyable, definitely a more veteran text. I liked your closer the best, good play on words.
--------> IMO, joey took this. I'll do a usual breakdown upon request if you'd like. it wasn't a landslide, your punches just did more damage...


Joey GMV
Abso

[Shiobock]

i dont think im a textee.. haha.. im more freestyle, in your face kinda style, this textin stuff is a lot different..

[Frank Black]

^ word much different lol. buh im doin this to get bettah like wordplay and ish.

anyway 2-0 uppin for the ko.

[Arvincible]

I agree with Absolute and Riggz...lol on everything.

vote - joey

this verse was much better than the one against TGYH


3-0 someone close this

[-MenaCe-]

3-0... Joey Piff wins by KO










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