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Haz
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Some One Try n Fucking Save Me,
We Might Just Go Crazy, I ran With Ambition
H ta the A z Was Doing Him Moving In Maybe..
but as He was Moving Out His moving Route
Made waterfalls turn into the Ruins drought..
So ambition is fucking starving, while hazard
is in the darkened,Part of a Picture where fixtures
Are nothing but the strongest like Spartan Enlister's
i lay a spark in a twister, Mister Fucking Save Me,
You Don't hear Me?? get cha q tip dipped With Raybees
i'm sick from all this shit, the loves filled with lies
The Kick Off Hauls ta Tic, Like tocs fill the sky..
at one point i was like i Will i'll Try...
Some'll say he did justice Others wana Kill the Guy
See i'm in the Zone i wanna leave,fuck the Ganja weed
i said The Shit For so Long I Shuld Get "Liar" Tatted on My sleeves
I feel the only One Gone is Me, Fuck dealing Shit Fuck Dealing Nicks
That Ain't my only road i've Drawn The T,Who Knows Where i'll Point To,
My Points Drew Cause they Carry out like Hollow points Threw,
Check The Triple Meaning, i'm a Triple Threat With Myself N My minds in the Middle Screaming...
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Post by Def-init »

I am lovin the meta's in this piece.
Great structure to.

"So ambition is fucking starving, while hazard
is in the darkened,Part of a Picture where fixtures
Are nothing but the strongest like Spartan Enlister's
i lay a spark in a twister, Mister Fucking Save Me,
You Don't hear Me?? get cha q tip dipped With Raybees
i'm sick from all this shit, the loves filled with lies
The Kick Off Hauls ta Tic, Like tocs fill the sky..
at one point i was like i Will i'll Try...
Some'll say he did justice Others wana Kill the Guy"

My fav part. nice.
- If I can't bend Heaven, I shall move Hell. -
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Re: Save Me

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very nice metaphors dope flow i really caught that all of this is my favourite so damm this is hella nice keep droppin haz
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: Save Me

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There were a bunch of stand out lines but these two specificially I liked a lot,

See i'm in the Zone i wanna leave,fuck the Ganja weed
i said The Shit For so Long I Shuld Get "Liar" Tatted on My sleeves


I agree that you can feel the emotion in this drop and that definitely makes it sound doper.
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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