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Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

Post by Loon E Lou »

this a track we finished the night of the 19th. kinda bout how we aint kids no more and shit done changed a grip. drop a feedback and lemme know ppl. gracias



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v1. Loon E Lou

v2. Young D

v3. DOC

Hooks: Loon E Lou and Sarah


hook:

Alotta shits changed ever since i grew up
i gotta hold my own now
the roads been tough
but na i cant stop
boy imma stand tall
imma show em all
and try to ball till i fall
boy imma run this city.
bring my boys wit me
bring the music to the streets
and put my heart on these beats.
we dodgin police
cus aint no more detention.
always kept it real while they stayed pretendin(pretendin)

-- Wed Jan 20, 2010 6:25 pm --

thas me on the beat also....
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Re: Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

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dope track nigga like I told u earlier girl is def nice D got off on it as well DOC was good 2 u like always no surprise my nigga keep droppin' nigga
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Re: Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

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This is straight fire homie, the beat is something I would fuck with real dope.

Your flow is very impressive along with your delivery, the hook is crazy man.

Young D's flow is nice and lyrics are ok delivery is definitely your strong point, good shit.

DOC flow is ok, lyrics are ok too, delivery is there solid verse.

Good drop.
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Re: Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

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good shit fellas i appreciate it. we ended up fixin the very last of the song. i let my girl get down a lil more. deffy thanks for the feed tho
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Re: Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

Post by P.T.R-ins »

godd shit...usually i disslike hooks ,but on this rap hook is nice..overall good work
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dat beat is crazy da lyrics ok off beat a lil bit though
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its ku fellas. all feedbak is appreciated
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Re: Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

Post by Riggz »

1st verse, nice flow way to ride the beat

2nd verse, flow needs work. He needs to learn how to let the beat guide his verse, rather than try to force his lyrics into the rhythem

3rd verse, wish I could've heard more of his... liked his presence and the way he delivered melody with his tone.. West coast style right there

the chick's Vocals during the hook to me probably should've changed up more.. it kind of got repeatative and annoying... maybe a few ho's and hum's switched up and maybe chorusin' her on some of your lines would've been better.

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this is cool i liked it... verses were really solid... beats fuckin dope man i like the beats u put out... the girl kinda went off key just a tad but its all good we all can't be american idols haha... but she did a good job too... otherwise tracks good fam... i'd bump this in the car if i had a copy haha... peace
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thas wusup fellas. all this feed is greatly appreciated.
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Re: Grown Up feat. Young D, DOC, Sarah

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haha. daamn. greatly appreciated TOYH. got too many damn ppl rollin thru my lab so ill def wrk on sum solo shit. im bringin out these other artists that come out on these tracks so all feedback on them is appreciated.
good lookin out g
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