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Haz
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Shoulders hold

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Under Pressure I'm Told Make Sure Ya Shoulders Hold
Here To Better My Soul, i'll Be Treasured With Goals
Measured In Gold At Whatever Measure I Fold
Flame Bodys Of Art Like Carved Sweaters Of Coal
They Ain't Hearing Me Out My Points Forever Untold
Never Have Sold Into Soul Trades, Demons Grant Cold Raids
Helpless Like No Aid, Sickened Like He Knows Aids
Life Flow Grazed This Snow Maze in Slow Blaze
That Makes No Sense In Both Ways, Blow Rage Out Cha Ears
I Take Music In, a Musician, 2hands Up like Abusive Limbs
I'm Smooth spitting, Proved Fixing the Pics better then
Ripping the Frame..Why hit the Kill switch Forget-tin The name
Every New Trend a Deception is Gained..
So you Have To Be Tricky Ta Get In The Game I Reckon The Same Goes Fa Me
Na I' Move Purified Like a Golden Sea, All Armageddons is Chained
Blood Diamonds Hold The Key, To a Section Of Pain
Militias Across The Globe, Destined To Let Off Them Loads ..
That Comes With No Profit But News Topics Leave It as enemies Prophet sold
Racism Racing Through Streams Of Eyes Rating a Scene
From The Haitians Who Scream To Chinese Holding a Asian Cu-sheen
Predicted Political Acts Should Be Every Hero's Rebel
Who's To Say We've Drew R Stay 2 Zero In Twelve
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Thought this was one of the doper ambition drops i have read, i thought it was pretty ill, flow and emotion wordplay it was all good man, good read. keep it up
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"Under Pressure I'm Told Make Sure Ya Shoulders Hold
Here To Better My Soul, i'll Be Treasured With Goals
Measured In Gold At Whatever Measure I Fold
Flame Bodys Of Art Like Carved Sweaters Of Coal
They Ain't Hearing Me Out My Points Forever Untold
Never Have Sold Into Soul Trades, Demons Grant Cold Raids"
At first I didn't like the transition into the different rhyme scheme at the end but then I read it again outloud and it flowed nicely. I liked the points forever untold line, that was hott.
"Helpless Like No Aid, Sickened Like He Knows Aids
Life Flow Grazed This Snow Maze in Slow Blaze
That Makes No Sense In Both Ways, Blow Rage Out cha Ears
I Take Music In, a Musician, 2hands Up like Abusive Limbs"
Alright I'm starting to see the pattern. The first line of this section was dope for real.

The rest of it was alright, good multis and you stayed on topic but for me the above quoted parts were the best part. Keep droppin bro.
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