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The Time's!

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Claustraphobic, chains that wrap the lost and hopeless
my thoughts the potion, potent, double cross the motive
as they sought the chosen, swords slash and hordes clash
stretchers to support backs, now where's your force at?
the God's can't course tracks, Demon's won't enforce acts
ultimately forced back, holdin' the tainted steel high
the times changed, sword traded pen, degraded real types
always defacing skill (right) they ain't making real lives
metaphorical being, cash and pain, the weak terror lust
the heads of Cerebrus, the times they may error us
sidetrack and embarress us, with fake friends and abusers
loose women, the seducers, the sirens, eyes n hair Medusa's
they all trademark the beast that wants to see me burnin' up
graveyard slanger tryna serve me dust from the earthy crust
industry germs in crumbs, I recite on times "non serviam"
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Re: The Time's!

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Claustraphobic, chains that wrap the lost and hopeless
my thoughts the potion, potent, double cross the motive
as they sought the chosen,

that was good

swords slash and hordes clash
stretchers to support backs, now where's your force at?

didnt like this


the God's can't course tracks, Demon's won't enforce acts
ultimately forced back,

this either.. maybe the scheme



, holdin' the tainted steel high
the times changed, sword traded pen, degraded real types
always defacing skill (right) they ain't making real lives
metaphorical being, cash and pain, the weak terror lust

No.

the heads of Cerebrus, the times they may error us
sidetrack and embarress us, with fake friends and abusers
loose women, the seducers, the sirens, eyes n hair Medusa's

ill

they all trademark the beast that wants to see me burnin' up
graveyard slanger tryna serve me dust from the earthy crust
industry germs in crumbs, I recite on times "non serviam

alright.


for the most part i didnt like This

i showed u why.





we all have Bad days.


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Re: The Time's!

Post by Riggz »

Lot of metaphores that stuck with the topic QZ, good job. The beginning outshined the ending but I liked the part about Medusa and your opening 2-3 bars. All around nice drop. Not too shabby.
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