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I can see, world in dysfunction women feel seduction
rap game disgusted, snap, crank, failure to conjunction
body full of nothin', shakin', function of the krumping
stroking ego's, full of pride, short skirted snake charmers
long haired demon, wings of pegasus, drippin' in blood flavored water
right before the slaughter, pulled aside carry'n guns to the sauna's
heated up, wetting down the authors of the schoolyard daughters
unabomber leotard, spinnin' in this world of famine and ether
my ballerina, dances to the melody of moanin' stomachs empty hands
crack rock that's freshly can'd, shipped into the arms of the every man
roots of evil, intertwined in this two step, crews rep'd with a voodoo hex
I been thru too much stress tryna perform like these dudes who view us less
just cuz I ain't tryna dance with the devil tonight I'll autograph the ball
then rehearse each step until all can depend how to choreograph your fall
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Re: Dancing

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I can see, world in dysfunction women feel seduction
rap game disgusted, snap, crank, failure to conjunction

Decent beginning



body full of nothin', shakin', function of the krumping
stroking ego's, full of pride, short skirted snake charmers
long haired demon, wings of pegasus, drippin' in blood flavored water

In a way this was weird but in a way it was Cool..
the wording is iffy.. u just gotta Work on it a Lil


right before the slaughter, pulled aside carry'n guns to the sauna's
heated up, wetting down the authors of the schoolyard daughters

Like This.. where u Listening to "State of you" ??


unabomber leotard, spinnin' in this world of famine and ether
my ballerina, dances to the melody of moanin' stomachs empty hands
crack rock that's freshly can'd, shipped into the arms of the every man


No .. wasn't appealing, holding no Real weight.


roots of evil, intertwined in this two step, crews rep'd with a voodoo hex
I been thru too much stress tryna perform like these dudes who view us less
just cuz I ain't tryna dance with the devil tonight I'll autograph the ball
then rehearse each step until all can depend how to choreograph your fall


Sick Way 2 Go out ..


Anyways this was a average Drop, because there was a strong case of Upp's And downs.. Which basically evens everything out.


good read,
Stay Up n Keep Dropping
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thanx for peeping it....and I was listening to that Angels Remix with Lupe on it for your information = )
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my ballerina, dances to the melody of moanin' stomachs empty hands
crack rock that's freshly can'd, shipped into the arms of the every man

that shit is hot.... i have forgotten how much work it takes to text...big ups kid
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Re: Dancing

Post by Munteskue_lol »

All your shit was coo and you had some pretty substantial lyrics. Sometimes it didn't flow in my head like the choreograph your fall line. You strike me more of a lyricist or spoken word poet than some one who drops tracks or does shows. It was good though, you had some really tight lines like
I can see, world in dysfunction women feel seduction
rap game disgusted, snap, crank, failure to conjunction
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roots of evil, intertwined in this two step, crews rep'd with a voodoo hex
I been thru too much stress tryna perform like these dudes who view us less
That flowed fuckin tight and there were really clever rhymes in there too
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Re: Dancing

Post by citizenslain »

shit was dope and deep to me. i got lost a few times with your measure which is aight though cause idk what you had going in your head or your rhyme style. def would set it off at a spoken word competition though.

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