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souljas r heroes 1

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ima show ya how a soulja holds his shouldas up
eyes wide but tired refusin to close em shut
open cuts show his blood but the fact they dont slow his trudge through the coldest mud
just shows his love for his country
hungry and humble a hero amongst the rubble
stumblin through the shadows till
the screams rattle and chill
his bones as his brothers die on the battlefield
mad as hell sad but still
they know they have to kill
tryin to keep his mind on home
but his pack is filled with battlegear
makin it heavy as hell wonderin how the hell he'll ever get out of there....
or if he'll get out of there
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Re: souljas r heroes 1

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Not a bad drop.

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Re: souljas r heroes 1

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hungry and humble a hero amongst the rubble
I just think this is a REAL standout line... I like ur flow tho simplistic like i write...but u droppin a whole lot which leads me to think u gonna improve really fast....stay on point dude and peep other dudes shit often..blief it or not it will give u many ideas.. tho i think u done this before cuz u got the concept down
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