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Verbal Callistenics

Post by eMCee Havic »

inclined to twist ya mind like rhymes interwined
within my mind as i design this lyrical grind
i find most yall are blind to the crime on the times
while i'm confined fake refined rappers are inclined
to drop lines covering dick's like calvin cline
these no spined slimes in the lime light all the time
are defined as busters but they "smothered in grime"
as a shit load of prime rappers are collectin they dimes
these mimes copy and bite and claim they one of a kind
i aint signed no strings attatched to these rhymes
I'm, a full blown unknown with aches in my bone
to own and hone this skill til i got it sown
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i know this flow is whole crazy like i wrote a scroll
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"inclined to twist ya mind like rhymes interwined
within my mind as i design this lyrical grind
i find most yall are blind to the crime on the times
while i'm confined fake refined rappers are inclined
to drop lines covering dick's like calvin cline"

right there thats where i knew this shit would be good haha...

good read man...
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Post by Munteskue_lol »

as a shit load of prime rappers are collectin they dimes
these mimes copy and bite and claim they one of a kind


Tight ass flow/line

But some of it seemed just like you were rhyming with a lack of purpose behind your writing, that would be my constructive criticism
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this dome is prone to moan an groan when i'm all alone
harder than stone i'm crushin microphones and drones
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yeah this started well but then seemed to get worse, i mean it had some nice lines like the Calvin Cline is was nice, but overall i wasnt feelin the read seemed a lil forced with rhymes but keep'em comin dood
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I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
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Re: Verbal Callistenics

Post by FlipSide »

Sum funny metas def in there... it seemed almost like u were rhymin to rhyme every other word..i see the complexity in it..but maybe too much...tho i saw some things in there i might look at again
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Re: Verbal Callistenics

Post by eMCee Havic »

yeah i was bored and fuckin off not a serious write, just seein how many rhymes i could rhyme.

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