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Haz
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Can't understand What you See Why Turn Biter?
Keep a Open Mind'll Help You Learn Quicker ..
Hit With That Ain't My Concern Bicker
Could Keep Contact, Upon Half Of No Con Acts
Contract Like That Would Work,No So its Combat
And Most Don't Know Where iv'e gone At
I Know What I've Gone From ..
That Same Sad Song Drum'd,I Beat Cha there
Still ta Keep a Care..Relief in gear
It Didn't Happen I Never Believed It Scared
Thats the way it Goes by Days ya Grow
More Then O.K ta Show you don't Have to Stay the Road
Way To go.. Hatred Woah, Maybe Not Quite Right There
But This rocky dreams Like a Height Nightmare ..
Clouded, Like Heaven is Crowded, Rowdy Like piper
Talking About Me, Outtie like Branding a Car Route See
A And B Is Closed Blinded So Theres No Achiever Mode
Minded By Other Vision's Why Put Trust In Friction
There Only Prank Callers Never Cuff Restriction
Given Up's Collision with Free will ta Get Stuck in Prison

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QwarterZ
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Re: What you see

Post by QwarterZ »

this was purdy sick
but the beginnin' should be BITTER
although I'm sure some people would get it
that's my only complaint really
besides the ending coulda hit harder
nice drop man!
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good dropped man!! beggining was lil kinda bitter like what feneix say but other wise it is damn nice
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to tell you the truth u had a lot of transition multies..if thats what u would call em or if they exist so i was lost for a minute but i caught up... and it was tight.... i think i can learn something from this unorthodoxed style
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