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Some playful, light hearted shit.

Yo I got these cats dread-in bars like Weezy in prison/
Cuz I be the sickest, kid, ask my pediatrician/
If you believe me then listen, never speedy with spittin/
Even genies be wishin they never seen me existin/
Read the description, better rewrite yer resume/
Before I swipe yer breath away like you hyperventilate/
The cypher renegade, beware of the underdog/
But I got it covered yall without wearin some coveralls/
Live like my number's called, chillin in purgatory/
Spittin my worthless stories cuz all of yer verses bore me/
Feel like I'm turnin forty, I'm over the hill these days/
But still I spill each phrase hopin it hits like Willie Mays/
And yet I kill these lames, never ran in the battlegrounds/
I'd dismantle clowns but I'd rather be slammin the gavel down/
But its a hassle now, I lack the time that I had before/
Back from the Iraqi war so I'm back to playin Daddy more/

Inspire a journey, set fire to gurneys/
So if u desire the earth, better hire attorneys/
Admire the verse, have u retirin early/
Cuz Ruck and hip hop is like Tiger and birdies/
Shootin an Eagle without a club and a ball/
I'm rugged and raw, watch yer flow come to a halt/
It means nothin to yall, but I'm stuck in the gold hour/
Throwin punches with no power but fuck it I won't cower/
Yer flow's sour, toy with biters like a playful dentist/
Destroy a cypher, I'm Joe Mauer playin table tennis/
Take a census, you already know who they're votin for/
The ghost with the flows galore, so potent yer throat is sore/
Roastin yer vocal cords, I won't even joke no more/
When shit is deep, you know my home is the ocean floor/
Yer dome is an open sore, my verse is the salt to it/
Throw you herbs in a vault, this is urban assault music/

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Post by FlipSide »

i dont see it as laid back cuz u had punches coming from everywhere lol.... over all touched a couple subjects.... like dam u were in iraq...?..Big ups...had some flow and a half as well .... And mad metaphors...the ocean floor one ive heard tho...still tight...
Yer flow's sour, toy with biters like a playful dentist/
Destroy a cypher, I'm Joe Mauer playin table tennis/
Take a census, you already know who they're votin for/
The ghost with the flows galore, so potent yer throat is sore/
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Post by Borat »

Like flip said there is punches galore in this, I see what you mean by light hearted. Had a simple yet very effective flow, I would like to hear this shit audio, the multies in this were purdy nice aswell. Keep em comin man this was some clean shit.

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Post by Glamtrash »

I remember when you first came to Illest. You've come a long way dude. I liked this. It flowed well throughout, which most seem to lose with length. It was full of punches but they seemed effortless, which again most seem to lose with length. Good job, keep droppin, etc.

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Preciate the feed. And no, this isn't a joke. I love Fear & Loathing. Haven't broken down and read the book yet, but I will. I'm working on finishing all of Vince Flynn's books right now and I'm the type of dude that can't start something without finishing it. I hate loose ends. But yeah, the name is derived mainly from my childhood nickname Gonzo, since I have a huge nose lol. It shows my more playful, can-take-a-joke side. And of course, the Dr. is a nod to Hunter S. Thompson and his creation. Anyways, thanks for the feed. I didn't think there were a lot of punches in here, just mainly wordplay and multies, which is what I go for when I'm not delivering a specific message. Anyways, enough with the bio.
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Post by Momeijah »

Flow And Multis Not Worth Mentioning, Same Ruskus Structure im Used To But i Donno i Felt The Multis Were More Creative, Or Maybe ive Just Not Read Any Of ur Drops For a While. i Liked The Punches Just Simple And Sometimes Funny, Nothin 'Damn' Worthy But u Kept The Same Consistent Standard From Start To Finish. i Liked The 2nd Half Of Verse 1 The Best.
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