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Raiza Sharp Gets In

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Im a monster, a hazy mess of blinded thoughts
only remains of my haters is an outline in chalk
and i just dare you to try and find me boss
theres a price to pay and fam your lifes the cost
burn you, coz this wicks wax/whack
timberwolf him, sprewell's on
you'll hear the click clack
like your putting a seatbelt on
This dudes an ass like he's wearing his pants low
i'll commit the crime and frame him, wasup Van Gogh
Murk him where he stands yo
coz my trance flow make all the girls dance slow
Tie up all your loose ends, weak A.F, you'll lose friend
it'll be this fools end, leave him with blue balls like hadouken
I go around, never been slippin E's but i be dissin fiends
So i guess i just have to blast this germ like Listerine
And honestly ya girl be missin me
I admit im real cool, but the steel of the gun be colder
And apparently asians cant drive, i might just run you over
Still you mouthin off like this gook acts a fool
but i wont hesitate coz everyday i cook cats like you ;)
Aka Raiza Sharp, R.A.I
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Post by $eR!oU$ SK!LL »

Shit that was tight homey.
I dont understand why you 0 and 12 with flow like that.
Maybe you lackin the punches.
But the metaphors are there fa sho.
Your flows on point.
I dont see really no flaws.
Tight shit, keep doin your thing!
Be eazy
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Post by FlipSide »

Wow at that last bar man......see this is what i was talking about...sick metaphors and sick flow... i see u be on this for a while and people here know u so no d'respect on that other drop..but this was TIGHT... worth my time to read and enjoy and even learn a lil...Ups
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No problem my dude.
Thanks for the feed bros

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Post by - Mutual - »

this was pretty nice, had some nice punchlines, and the rhyme scheme was nice too keep me on my toes had some dope punches aswell and like Flip said that last bar was dope as hell, was nothin to the others cus it was all good though keep bringin that shit man
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Arvincible »

"leave him with blue balls like hadouken"

hahahahah amazing



i havent read a scripture in a minute and this is some good stuff


keep writing man u went from wack to crack on this one
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