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Livid - Shaking off the cobwebs..

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Smashed excellence when I became a lyricist
Mass exodus of everything to my fingertips
I stand virtuous on the edge of precipice
Bands of Cerberus wrestling Pegasus
Encaged in the mainframe of the matrix
Playing games to engage your patience
Traversing suns, learning links to creation
Conversing tongues with the kings of ancients
Hidden depths of me clouding the sea
Ridden with leprosy and shrouded disease
Reciting their sermons, exploiting your service
Encircling serpents enslaving you servants
Re-write the bible backwards in Sumerian
Inviting disciples to bow to the Aryans
Encrypted a treaty and reasoned with god
Conscripted a legion with treasonous thoughts

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Keep your fucking mouth shut - till you define silence
Racism was manufactured to incite violence,
Legislated educated and we fought twice is succession
Ignorance has only escalated in times of recession
Our fore fathers fought for our freedom, breaching the beaches
Now your voting for an idiot with similar speeches.
We fought the repressed, engaged unity an in joint
And they try to hijack a hero to personify points.
You can put your case across, and I’ll watch it dissolve
Ultimately your cross with race and there’s no party involved.

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Educate for contribution yet replicating past solutions
Demonstrate my elocution to execute a revolution
Urban trinity, congregate vicinities, hear us making noise
Inherent affinity’s between these entities, got you missing points
Lies so seductive you want it, and they jus feed off your confusion
Propaganda is product of profit, and free speech is an illusion
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Re: Livid - Shaking off the cobwebs..

Post by - Mutual - »

this was good you got my vocabulary man, the flow was nice and consistent just need to work on the punchlines and mutlies otherwise this was a dope piece

check mine out thanks

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The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: Livid - Shaking off the cobwebs..

Post by FlipSide »

this was a nice impact piece dude... i like the switch of styles from the first to second verse... the first verse was dope tho... good vocab id like to see u drop some more writtens and i bet the audio got some flow to it just by reading...of cource i might be wrong...
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