Why i Write (Part 3)

[Haz]

it's Always Been A Fact Actions Speak Louder Then Words
When Mamii Birthed My Son Noone Made Me Prouder Than Her


At First i Was Pitchin Bags Jus Ta Put Diapers On His Ass
i Was Always Pullin My Hair Out 'Til My Lighter Hit Tha Grass
Glad Them Days Are Gone i Never Thought Tha Shit Would Pass
Tha Shit Turned Me into An Alcoholic i Would Always Hit Tha Flask
Shit Was A Struggle Half Tha Time i Couldnt Pay Tha Rent
Half Tha Time i'd Find Myself Countin Days Before They Went


Wooooow "COuntin Days Before They Went".. ^^^ Dat Shit is Fuckin DEEP!


Always Tellin Him No Guns Papii They Bring Pain When They Sing
My Boy is My Life An Savior So Ya Kno i'll Name Him A King < Smooth FInished..

7.9/10...

Your Flow Wus Smooth.. U Wus Deep.. Loved it.. Look Out For My Next Drop Aiite..

[*.HarleQuin.*]

ur drops are always full of wisdom
but id love to see more intricacy
try upping ur vocabulary and ur pieces
will be a lot more interesting

[complexity]

"it's Always Been A Fact Actions Speak Louder Then Words
When Mamii Birthed My Son Noone Made Me Prouder Than Her "

That and the last last line were real dope.

A little bit short for such a deep story though. You need to add a second verse once in a while.

8.0/10

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

...Shit Kinda Reminded Me Of Tha Watered Down "Hip Hop You Saved Mah Life" ..
But it Was Mad Real ..
You Made a Better Life For ya Son always a Beautiful Thing to See ..
This Piece Was Good ..
I Really Felt it ..and it Was Nice Comin From U ..

[HKX]

ehh yes sir last line was ill dawg man this is deep homie I felt the whole drop this I felt a lot tho I'm wit u there dawg

At First i Was Pitchin Bags Jus Ta Put Diapers On His Ass
i Was Always Pullin My Hair Out 'Til My Lighter Hit Tha Grass
Glad Them Days Are Gone i Never Thought Tha Shit Would Pass
Tha Shit Turned Me into An Alcoholic i Would Always Hit Tha Flask

[Shady_08]

i ain't even gonna start talkin bout the technique and shit.. i'm that into multi's, nameplay, worlplay and shit when i feel a song... and that verse i've felt... 10/10.... i didn't feed part 2 cuz [donno'] didn't felt it..

it's Always Been A Fact Actions Speak Louder Then Words
When Mamii Birthed My Son Noone Made Me Prouder Than Her
i Look Back On Life An Smoke An L Now That it Hurts
On Tha Come Up i Had No Toys Just Tha Ground And Tha Dirt
At First i Was Pitchin Bags Jus Ta Put Diapers On His Ass
i Was Always Pullin My Hair Out 'Til My Lighter Hit Tha Grass
Glad Them Days Are Gone i Never Thought Tha Shit Would Pass
Tha Shit Turned Me into An Alcoholic i Would Always Hit Tha Flask
Shit Was A Struggle Half Tha Time i Couldnt Pay Tha Rent
Half Tha Time i'd Find Myself Countin Days Before They Went
Four Years Old Now it Already Seems Like Tha Boy is Grown
He'll Never See What i Saw i Make Sure He Got Toys At Home
Always Tellin Him No Guns Papii They Bring Pain When They Sing
My Boy is My Life An Savior So Ya Kno i'll Name Him A King

Best part! 5/5 .. 10/10