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I Destroy Rappers(wrappers)Like Christmas Morning/
Some Deserved Death Left with No Mourning/
Like Ebeniezer I've Seen The Ghosts of Past/
Im So Furious That I don't need To Be Fast/
Causing Deadly Oil Spills Like my Names BP/
Call me Ol Napster Cuz MY Music Is Free/
I Hit the Streets Like a Boxing Homeless CEO/
Expensive Gas And Insurance with a Geccko/
Let Go Of Hate so Go on get Rich Rappers/
I'll stay True Emcee Like Marshall Mathers/
Hip Hop's an Art I Take It To the Heart/
Must Be Piccaso cuz my Mind Fell Apart/
Pulled myself toghther Like Im Humpty Dumpty/
In the Digital Underground but u Rap like a Puppy/
Far Beyond any Talent Skill or Abilites/
I am Who I am Past The Metaphor's and Similes/
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Lots of metaphores n similies in there which is some form of creative .....But i feel u were as shallow as a grown man with floaties in a kiddie pool... Anywho it was descent bro... U should try to make your bars flow a lil better IMO... i dunno im not the best critic here..
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Post by The Gonz »

This was alright. Had some metas and similies, good ideas. But the complete lack of multies makes it seem fairly basic. I'd work on multies and more complex rhyme schemes. This shows a lot of potential though.

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Post by MC Believe »

thx for the replies
it was more a self metaphor/simile piece

But i appreciate the criticsim
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