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songsfrmtheleft
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My heart-beat

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So I had too much fun with this one, I was doing some homework but couldn't concentrate with this specific Chase N. Cashe beat in my head. I decided to take a 30min break: 20 to write, and 10 to record and level out the vocals a bit. Delivery is still off (because I suck at writing), but oh well lol...

Uhh...I could see it from a mile a way.
I get ignored trying to talk every other day.
But it's whatever, there's more where I found you at.
Next time you see me don't wave, I won't acknowledge that.
Unlucky for you I found a gift that I won't waste.
This song is just for you, I'll name drop another day.
But in the meantime, I’ll recline
And let this shit reel em in like a fishing line.
It’s so interesting when I write a few lines, I feel free
But when I read I’m like “no, it can’t be”
I never thought I had the talent to make it
I never thought people would download and play it
But let’s face it, I got a little swagger
And I wonder if they cheering or is it laughter
Fuck it, I was never concerned about what people thought
I go into the store and see all the crap that people cop
Just for a better image
Life is just pretending
It’s just suspended
By a false sense of security that was just amended
And then I just pray, that people say
It’s not the same thing, this is everyday
That’s why we sleep and pray at the same time
Right next to the baseline
Where we commit the most crimes
Around midnight
That’s in the moonlight
I hope you get it right, I hope you kidding right

Just hear me cough it
Some niggas say “damn, he spits, he barfs it”
Right up in his apartment
And now I’ve become a target
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Re: My heart-beat

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Is that Drake?

...just sayin
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Yea it does sound kind of Drake-ish
but the beat is dope, your flow is cool
but your vocals need to be up'd a bit
it seems like your letting the beat over power you
either way as far as the lyrics go they on point
really had a nice message my dude, hopefully you re-do this
I'd like to hear it redone, I'd bump it, nice lil' drop tho' man
keep writing!
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