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Airborne

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I was on the bus and heard this song, and realized that I may have an extended metaphor I could go in on before I we arrived on campus. So surprisingly enough, I got it in less than 10 minutes. Enjoy :)

Written to Diggy Simmons "Airborne"

I own it, it's mine to have and hold
I'm a young owner only 21 years old
If you doubt me, it's your first mistake
Here's a notice for you the last won't be yours to make
Pay attention if you will, lend me your ears
I'll put you in a heavenly state no tears or fears
When we fly away, there won't be much to say
Just melt the hearts of those that look my way
And while I'm at it, I could never fall
But if I do will they praying for me, alter call
Never drop the ball, Prime Randy moss
Tip toeing to the pile on, there's another loss
Ive heard i should've doubled down, but at what cost
They were influencing me...but I'm the boss
I reflected on perspective and got my signals crossed
It's so easy being fly, when you remain a hawk
But what happens when those poachers come along and try to dethrone
You...from the seat you own
I....remember where I came from
And the chicks that took trips when I've flown
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

felt like this was incomplete, not just at the end but in a few other places, for having it done under 10 minutes it was pretty decent, keep droppin
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Re: Airborne

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yeah you're right, I posted it from class. But even the rhyme scheme is abysmal. Prolly should've looked it over. Thanks for the comment!
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