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Wings

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Guuuuuessss what it's about. ALL feed will be returned.



Hey, it's me again. I don't believe in leaving friends
Even if we're clinging onto something that needs to end
This page I can't turn, the writing's on the wall
A new chapter's inviting me, I'll fight it till I fall
I don't wanna move, all I want is you if you want me too
Say the words, I'll always follow you if you call me through
Out of this nothingness, I've had enough of this
Sick and tired of fucking being stuck in a rut, depressed
I'm pleased that I had the strength in me to resist you
But I didn't think you'd treat it like I was meaning to diss you
And at first I didn't realise the degree of the issue
I really miss you, feels like you took a piece of me with you
Now I feel stuck, caught in a void, shocked and destroyed
Abandoned, deserted, my soul is rotting and lost in the noise
Of wings just pounding the air, loud as a snare
While I'm trying to build a tower on grounds for despair
Trying to fill, trying to substitute something for you
Medicine that can help me glide till the suffering's through
Gotta say, I'm worse without you, I'm quick to admit it
Sitting, liqoured up thinkin if I should give you a visit
Maybe I could've been different, maybe I could've had stuff to do
Instead of just ditching everything cause I was stuck with you
So let me just tell you that I owe my fuck ups to you
Or ups and downs, you tell me, ain't I the biggest schmuck you knew ?
Talents wasted, for nothin, we came to squat in the end
I could've been a better person had you not been my friend
Invested so much in you now I got nothin to show for it
Thanks for going through life with me, while I was fuckin blowin it
You made me do this for us, and ran off while I was blind
Now I feel like I've wasted my life, a sign of the times
My friends tellin me that we were spending too much time together
And I was stupid enough to believe that we would fly forever
They said you were bad for me, and it was sad to see
But I loved every minute we shared, till it ended in tragedy
Fuck our bond, you designed it with lies, slyly disguised
Keeping me confined, full of spite you were tryin to hide
Your games were so damn refined I thought I was outta my mind
But now I'm wise to the signs and I got fire in my eyes
Watching the wings, man, as they rise to the sky
And fuckin leave me to die like a cry in the night
The same ones that picked me up, everytime without a doubt
And took me upto the stars whenever I was down and out



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it's about drugs
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Post by - Mutual - »

man thats pretty sick i have to say, definitely some heartfelt lyrics there, and alot of quotable's i have to say

Now I feel stuck, caught in a void, shocked and destroyed
Abandoned, deserted, my soul is rotting and lost in the noise
Of wings just pounding the air, loud as a snare
While I'm trying to build a tower on grounds for despair

those were dope, the whole piece had a smooth flow and some nice metaphors to it no doubt to that, the mulites went well and the vocab was pretty nice nothing over the top but kept it comin but the whole piece was a good read and a dope drop on this man keep this shit comin
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The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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This was nice. At first I was like, shit this cats seems attached in an unhealthy way to whoever he's writing about, then a little over halfway though I started to think this wasn't actually about a person, and by the end I figured it musta been drugs. But you hid your subject nicely, well done. Your flow is always on point, and has a real nice rhythm to it. Vocab wasn't bad. All around this is a solid drop. Keep em coming...
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Re: Wings

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IntrinsicCadence wrote:seems attached in an unhealthy way
Which is pretty true if u think about it.

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Re: Wings

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

i like that it wasn't something random, this was well thought out and delivered, the rhymescheme was brought nicely and the creativity overall was noticed, a few parts that i may have worded differently had it been me writing but then again this isn't me writing lol, good drop

nice name btw...fag
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The idea behind this piece was well brought
for some reason I felt like I've read this before
but at the same time I don't think I have?
either way the piece seems very well thought out
I want to know what made your write this...
mmm...yea...either way a dope piece nonetheless
the flow was on point and it kept me interested
especially with the beginning, either way...nice drop
keep it up man, 2nd piece of yours and I'm impressed
keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!
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