My Struggle *REMASTERED*

[Colossus]

I am VERY new to serious audio. I have done two legit mastered verses so far. If you could just say a few words that'd be great. I'll return the feed ASAP.

http://www.supashare.net/hjgz3gj4m2fp

I'm back to square one, I should call this place my home
My humble abode, when I'm alone and in my zone
Cause I...I been here before, must not of shut the door
Now I'm back so I wonder what the fuck I struggle for
It's something more than a piece of ass or a hoe
Those things are trash and my town is fuckin littered with those
A prick from a rose hurts the most because it's beautiful
And it's effect on you's the opposite and not the usual
If I was cruel to you do you think you woulda stayed?
Cause love and hate are just different sides of a blade
I should of strayed and never taken that path
Cause when you praise, you see just how long relationships last
I could've taken it back, and really say what I thought
But I know a guy, who knows a guy, who'd hate if we fought
He goes crazy a lot, for what I do to his bitch
Cause I'm a cover up for a decent guy who used to exist

[Kuhlerblynd]

Aight honest opinion, you started this shit hot as fuck. I mean, you were really riding the beat well, and your delivery was on point.

This section however...
If I was cruel to you do you think you woulda stayed?
Cause love and hate are just different sides of a blade
I should of strayed and never taken that path

Is where you seemed to slow down and miss syllable counts. Like small awkward pauses in there when you picked it back up here...

Cause when you praise, you see just how long relationships last


That seems to fit much better, you feel what Im saying? Other than the small brief awkward pauses, this shit is tight fam. One.

-- Fri Nov 12, 2010 7:33 pm --

Can you vote on this

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/murk- ... 19063.html

Or feed on this..

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/colle ... 18949.html

Thanks

[Colossus]

Thanks man, means a lot. I wrote those parts do be delivered that way...guess I won't do it again lol. Appreciate the feed. Returning feed now.

[Lawgix]

its sick dude honestly... nice lyrics... mixed nice... i'd bring up the vocals a touch n turn the beat down a notch cuz its hard to understand you thru the whole thing... other wise delivery was really nice... flowed well... good shit man... keep at it

if you could feed this it would be appreciated....

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/lawgi ... ml#p155473

[Colossus]

Thanks man. Just returned the feed. I'll be checking out more of your stuff in the future.

[Chesapeake]

the tone and the concept is there.. im feeling the fresh word choice, though i'd like to hear you enunciate a lil more while still staying true to your laid back swagger.. also, just loosen up a bit. some parts were stiff, but overall the piece is passionate and heading in the right direction. not bad at all for your 2nd serious recording, keep it up dude!

[Colossus]

Thanks guys, returning feed now.

[2xS]

Ite I'm Mobile So Yeah Lol I Listened To It, And From What I Heard Its Nice. I Do Agree That You'll Wanna Turn The Beat Down A Lil Cuz That Sample Is Overpowering Your Vocals. Delivery Is Smooth In My Opinion. I Cudnt Really Hear The Syllable Count Issue, But I Can't Listen Perfectly Either. I Think Tha Song Has Good Substance From The Lyrics. I LOVE The Concepts Behind The Prick From A Rose Line, As Well As The Love And Hate Are Different Sides Of A Blade. Very Creative In My Eyes! Overall, Good Track. Jus Work That Overpower Issue N Ull Be Strait Famz

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[Colossus]

I tried to fix some of the stuff you guys said about the mixing, I hope it's to your liking.

[- Mutual -]

man this shit is nice no doubt about it, still the vocals need to be turned up and the beat turned down like Lawgix said otherwise you were fire with this rode the beat well and delivery was dope keep at it man

[Colossus]

man this shit is nice no doubt about it, still the vocals need to be turned up and the beat turned down like Lawgix said otherwise you were fire with this rode the beat well and delivery was dope keep at it man

Higher? I'll try but it might sound a bit echoey from the way I mix. This isn't the final version. I'm releasing a collab tape in a couple of weeks and this will be on it.

Thanks for the feed man.

[- Mutual -]

i think it's the reverb on it man yeah the lyrics dont need to be turned up much but right now the beat still sounds higher, shame there is so much reverb on the vocals otherwise turning them up would be alot easier but well man i look forward to hearing the final version and if you ever want any mixin or anything or a collab i'm open to anything man pm me if you wanna hear any of my new tracks or anything i'm too lazy to post them up lol

[Colossus]

Sounds good man. Expect a PM eventually haha.

Is this better? http://www.supashare.net/48ci2qn74wal

And it's not really reverb, I barely use any. It's from where a layered the track with the rough vocals under the mastered ones. Didn't turn out as nice as I had hoped.

[- Mutual -]

that does sound better yeah man but still the beat is over bearing the lyrics have you got msn or Aim or something easier than havin a conversation on here lol and we'll take a pop at getting shit done lol

[Slicka]

*nice lyrics and nice mastering* seemed on point everywhere but some parts were hard to hear