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interesting topic lol...um the chorus could use work. I like it but you tried to force the words in, just rewrite so it fits in with the beat and sound smooth, ya lyrics conveyed the theme of the song well...Can't really be critical about flow on this one, just work on timely delivery, besides that you have the emotion and presence.
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Vocals should be turned up, your flow was constant, im not sure but i didnt hear any adlips on the hook.. also i dont know but i think the last hook was off beat the whole time... Your verses were alright nothing special that stood out but it was def decent.. i little bit more... emotion/energy/UMP whatever you wanna call it could have made the verses/hook just extra interesting... over all its a good track.. keep it up fam
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thanks for the input im using my pro tools and shit havent quite figured out the mastering/mixing on it yet so right now im jus playin wit it and yeah the last hook is off lol
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