6 Bars I Wrote For a Collab

[Momeijah]

Was gonna drop it weeks ago but since there's been no signs of life from the guys I was doing it with I might aswell unload it. I'll return all feed obviously.


I'm savage with the baddest spits so fuck ur one trick magic kid
My talent's scattered over every fuckin field like rabbit shit
You can tell who I taught though, the rest I don't bother with
Cause ur boring ass flows always screamin 'moe-not-in-us' (monotonous)
Smashing wack emcees and I don't mean to brag when I beat em
But I'm so sharp tongued it's like chicks on the rag when I eat em
I'm the baddest trust me weiner I don't need to bust a heater
Cause I'm quick to thrust a cleaver that's bigger than Justin Bieber
I write that bad shit showin might and wrath when the mic is passed
Even Lance don't have the balls to step to this psycho(cycle)path
I'm the godliest, facing me it's gonna be sodomy bitch
'Throwin the Greatest Hits' like frisbee with an anthology disc

[aLb]

"Cause I'm quick to thrust a cleaver that's bigger than Justin Bieber" LMFAO! Oh I how I hate that little fucker.

Anywayz, not a bad read Scotch. Nice punches and shit. Had that "I'll kill you and your whole family" type feel to it. (And I mean that in a good way )

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[MesaR]

m savage with the baddest spits so fuck ur one trick magic kid
My talent's scattered over every fuckin field like rabbit shit

hahahaha, dope opener good work domino
it was pretty funny drop, put a smile to my face

[Alvin]

But I'm so sharp tongued it's like chicks on the rag when I eat em

HAHAAHAHAHA this is nice! i like it. Props on being able to visualize this and write it without throwing up lol

[Kuhlerblynd]

I'm savage with the baddest spits so fuck ur one trick magic kid
My talent's scattered over every fuckin field like rabbit shit

Nice opener that made me chuckle. First line was kinda filler ish though.

You can tell who I taught though, the rest I don't bother with
Cause ur boring ass flows always screamin 'moe-not-in-us' (monotonous)

This line is better all the way thru IMO. Not as funnny, but a nice punch with good wordplay.

Smashing wack emcees and I don't mean to brag when I beat em
But I'm so sharp tongued it's like chicks on the rag when I eat em

This is a cool image punch.

I'm the baddest trust me weiner I don't need to bust a heater
Cause I'm quick to thrust a cleaver that's bigger than Justin Bieber

Damn, just when I think I dont hear enough about this kid, YOU actually include him in your verse lmfao. This image punch was kinda cool, but you may have been able to incorporate some wordplay in the first line instead of the baddest blah blah again...

I write that bad shit showin might and wrath when the mic is passed
Even Lance don't have the balls to step to this psycho(cycle)path

This is good wordplay too, and Im a fan of that being involved in any battle type verse. Here, once again, is baddest/bad shit reference. Anyone need a hype man? Ahaha. All jokes. Anyway, this was a solid concept.

I'm the godliest, facing me it's gonna be sodomy bitch
'Throwin the Greatest Hits' like frisbee with an anthology disc

This was a solid concept too. Nicely done.

Well, you have some nice image punches, brought a comedy punch, and some nice wordplay. Over-all, this is nicely done, however I would say you could do more with you set-ups in this piece. Thats about the only thing I have negative to say. The flow was on point. Keep droppin MoestraDOMus. Ahaha.

Oh, and feed Chapter Four, if you dont mind. Thanks.

[Momeijah]

I agree about the setups n shit. There wasn't much inspiration behind this drop it was just individual punches I wrote down at random times and decided to quickly make into a collab verse.

Thanks for the feed.