T-Pain - Motivated Ft Mutual

[- Mutual -]

if you aint know there was a competition where you spit on Tpains beat off his new mixtape and send it in, the winnner gets the song on his mixtape with him, and gets a spot on his album, i couldnt give a shit about the comp lol i liked the beat so go on it, nothing spectacular but i thought i'd get this shit up, enjoy, all feed will be returned....

Lyrics:


Killin The Brave With A Million Saved And You People Aint Able To Say Shit
Filling The Day With A Trillions Ways Of An Equals Vision Of Favourites
If You See Me You Better Believe It, If I'm Feeding You Better Recieve It
I'm Bleeding You Better Achieve It, Cause Things That I'm Seeing Are Outta The Sequence
Motivation Is Caused By The Swagger I'm Holding This Nation No Thought For A Stagger
This My Creation Im Throwing It Atcha A Manifestation Alone With A Dagger
It's My Capacity Syllabled Gravity Ridiculed Action Packed With A Rhapsody Feelin You
Rap'll Be Hittin You Acts Of A Villain Do Things When The Stacks'll Be Spillin Through
I'm Unlockin A Weapon An Rockin A Session And Jottin Down Lines Got Me Blockin Progression
A Forgotten Obsession Of Rotten Aggression Keepin Them On Their Toes & Stoppin'em Guessin
You Know I Keep Flowing, Straight From A Tap, Show'll Keeps Going Demonstrating A Blast
Your Hating It Fast I'm Playing A Draft, Your Hoes Just Keeps Blowing, Raping Your Raps!
You Kinda Weak, Your Rhymins Bleak
If Ya Lines Are Robbed Then Biter Bite ME!!
And This Where T Goes
Boom Duh Duh Duh Ahhhh

[Alvin]

Well the beats fire, but on to you; You sound dope man, but its a little hard to hear your words, like mumbling. Boom dodo dum do dah! you fed into the chorus which was bad ass. Maybe playing with your EQ and raising some of the High's will bring you justice. Your voice is real deep, so with an intricate flow as yours, it gets a little smeared together. I was expecting more though? Good drop man, you have some skill. The verse before the chorus is prolly my favorite cuz i understand clearly what your saying. Singing may not be some of the best of you, but i felt where you were going. Dope drop man.

[2xS]

Yoooo. . .I Was Really Feeling The Multiple Rhymes, It Was Like EVERYTHING Flowed And Rhymed Together. Loved It. Like Halfway Thru Ur Verse, I Got That Head Nod In real Deep And Even Laughed At What You Said! That's How You Know Shit's Raw. When Tha Listener Either Gets A Smile Or Laughs At Your Creation!. Deff On Point. I Agree wit AMH About How Your Voice Is So Deep That Some Of Tha Flow Sounds Jumbled Together. He's Probably Right About The EQ Stuff, Me, IDK Anything About That Yet, So I Can't Really Give Advice There. The Quality Was Good, But Like We STated, It Sometime Became Jumbled. If It Wasn't For The Lyrics, We Probably Woulda Been Like What'd He Say? I'm Sure You Can Clear That Up. The Autotune Part At The End Was Funny. I For One Would Never Use It, But You Did A Good Job With It. Props! Anyways, Good Drop Man. Lookin Forward to Hearin More. Hell, I Might Even Hop On This Contest LOL

[- Mutual -]

thanks for the feed man and yeah i need to learn about raising EQ and shit at some point but yeah deffo apprecciated and yeah the singing was lacking in effort i could have come better than that lol and yeah Double S thanks for the feed glad you enjoyed that shit, you have some tight shit peep this contest good luck to you man and i didnt use autotune man couldnt be bothered workin out all the notes and shit but yeah thanks no doubt

[2xS]

I Thought That Was Autotune At The End For The Singing Part??? My Bad If I Was Mistaken LOL

[- Mutual -]

Nah man no auto tune for me no doubt though good shit on the feed man

[FlipSide]

t Pain Killed This Shit... The Beats Fyyyyyaaaaahhhh.... Waiting For Ur Verse.... I Like The Fast Flow Dog... Multies Are Off The Heeeezy... Nice Lil Pauses Too... I Cant Say More Other Than Shit Is Fire... The Hook Is Nasty Too Bro... U Getting Much Better Than When I Last Heard U Bro.. For Real Man... Shit Was Real Good. Niggas Better Stop Sleeping Homey. 1

[- Mutual -]

thanks for the feed Flip deffo apprecciated hope we can get somethin poppin soon

[Kuhlerblynd]

Yeah Pain killed this. I like your flow, up the middle of your verse its hard to tell some of the words apart. Its almost like to you need to move the mic from you a little, and you need to not pack your words so tight. I listened to it again, and you have some tight lyrics. Maybe you can just cut out a word here and there to help that. I like the track though. Keep getting at it fam. One.

[MesaR]

T-pain is a gay cunt.

Anyway, i didn't really like this fam you're a way better topical writer then being an audio head, i give you props for spitting it that fast with the multies, i would of fucked up and stuttered no doubt, haha.

Keep posting.

[IntrinsicCadence]

Your verse was pretty damn good Mutual, though there is some room for improvement that I think you could definitely step up to. I like the way you fast flow with the beat, it meshes well with T-Pain's style on his verse, but at the same time with your fast flow some of your words get smashed together a little bit, like if each word was separated a little more it'd make for a much smoother flow- if u know what I mean. If you could do that while maintaining the fast flow, I think it would really make your verse killer. Lyrically, I ain't got no qualms with your words, I think your use of multis and your ability to say something interesting in a unique way really makes your lyrics shine. Overall, this was a nice listen, and I actually liked ur verse more than T-Pain's (not considering the production quality of course, as his was perfect and yours could use some work).

[Deciple]

yeah tpain really killed this beat, dope hook and all.. your verse's style was perfect for the track but if the lyrics wasnt posted then it would have been hard in parts to understand what you were saying.. like Murk said, some words were crammed in the line.. its nice to hear the fast pase going thru the chamber.. not alot of illest rappers do fast rap... over all this was dope man

[- Mutual -]

thanks for all the feed no doubt it's all being taken in, and yeah i know the words to clash into each other but thats cause i usually spit fast paced but not this fast paced just me experimenting i suppose but thanks to everybody that gave it a listen no doubt i'll get back to you on anything you want

[Alvin]

Alright Mutual, I listened to it again to hear the EQ action and sweet, takes time. Prolly a little too colorful, but major improvement. Funny story; I sent Slug (from the group atmosphere) a message everyday for about a month. I asked him constantly where i was lacking. Amongst the advice he finally gave me, he said I waste to much time sending messages lol. Point of the story is, he told me the single most important thing you could do in front of a microphone is PROject. He explained that rapping past the microphone with your mouth as open as possible will get you to be as audible as can be. So I'm not saying there is anything wrong with the way you rap, but maybe, rapping past the mic will make fast rap seem less mumbled. Kinda like throwing a punch, you shouldn't retract on impact, but push through punching their face back. Just a thought, Good job with the EQ. mids are your friend too.

[Slicka]

yo i liked ya shit fam ya wordplay and multis are on point jus hard to hear some points but wit the lyrics their i could see what it was so hot joint. good drop