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Re: That's Rugged Part. 3

Post by Grim »

great multies, nice flow to it...good stuff bro....
We gotta feed our young so they're not eating crumbs
Most are poisoned, the sting has stung, the demons won
The reasons stunned, but it wouldn't seem as dumb...
If the KO didn't leave em stuck between swing & swung
Lying on the mat, speak in tongues, bleeding gums
Wheezing lungs, head's a beating drum, feeling numb
Think I'm done, a peasant stain under Kingdom Come

I love that section of rhyme scheme...nice
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Re: That's Rugged Part. 3

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great scheme leads to great flow, good shit really liked the flow, was str8 on point.. good multis. just a solid dropp

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Re: That's Rugged Part. 3

Post by thadevious1 »

this was prety nice, but could be improved on
cause your just adding things up at the end
and that takes away from a sentence based structure
but never the less with multi verses ppl tend to write this way
I'm also guitly of the fact :lol:

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