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Knowledge Was Born

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Knowledge was born

knowledge was born within cryptic messages
I put on another passage to rid of ya benevolance
ya talkin out the ass crack you'll get ya skull cracked
I put down lines to enlighten the minds of the savage
you Neandertahl spastic's should get the message
I'm way beyond ya radar, i'm in bermuda triangulatin
It's all geometrics, I practise presice shot's, you just hatin
go talk to jaweh mr J.O.E. play time's over today
A men, you play pretend see any man could die from shit talkin
Dont remind your self of that sentence you a shit talker still walkin
still trynna front infront of my face come on man
you sticking with no program, get reprogrammed
presice shots to the dome punch lights out
you can get it any wich way you're asking no doubt
I pull all stops out you just fumbling
ya under 9 i'm up in 3's where knowledge was born from the beginning
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this was allright, fell off alot for such a short piece, was feeling that you fell off the rhyme sceme quite frequently. but good vocab tho

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Re: Knowledge Was Born

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yeah i know this is offbeat like hell
I wrote this realy fast and almost didnt put any thought in it
and almost all my writtens are actualy freestyles :lol:
and honestly my first language isn't English
but i've been writin rhymes for over 15 years now
and should know every trick in the book
but I like simple schemes and use more inner rhymes than multis
and I like to use a lot of imagery instead
to realy let people picture my words line after line
but great to hear you liked this verse THKS for the crit

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