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Defiance
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Verbal Graffiti

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This is graffiti marking the streets
its heartless deeds against whats falsely seen,
an its all from me its grabbing and calling me
like there is no sovereignty
whether your rich or struck with poverty
not a novelty, honestly so halt your team
its called obscene cause its far from clean
it hustles hard and never falls fatigue
its all i need, to make it throught this fucked up life
to do something right, just hit the clutch an drive
cuz even buzards fly on summer nights
so i strike like i fight with a hundred mikes
its nothing like, whats out there an current
i'll flourish and drop bombs like turrets
you heard it, and your brain was oh so nourished
its served cold but it burns like a furnace
calm on the surface, but twisted inside
never living a lie cuz i'm driven to fly
we living to die so i envision the sky
an the feel the rhythm and vibe to get a grip on my life
despite the physical strifes, the wrong and the rights
of men and the mice from the pulls of a vice
but i'd gladly pay the price
to be driven in living my life



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just a verse off a track im working on

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Post by marc038 »

I kinda liked it.
There were some good lines in it and love to hear it on a track.

Keep it up

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This would sound great on a track, no doubt, nice mutlies done well i thought kind of helped the flow no doubt, looking forward to maybe seeing the full track man
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Immortal Javelin »

it was tight but kinda basic. but other wise it was good
Straight through your abdomen unraveling @ the speed of a javelin
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Post by Static »

i really like this, it seems like it has a good flow. I would love to hear an audio.
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