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Raps the only positive about my existance, at last, finally, I believe I can go the distance, I've always been quite introverted, confidant inside, but shy and nervous on the surface, but now it's time upon me I concentrated, too long about others have I contemplated, now I'm gonna concentrate on my true calling, always climbing and never fucking falling, I can hear the barz hollering, "spit us to the masses", intoxicating minds just like poison gasses!!

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The Flow was cool..wasn't crazy lyrical but wasn't bad either. I liked it...
people will probably to change your structure...



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vocab was above average and flow was decent. Nothing hard hitting lyrically and the structure sucks.
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agreed^^

but it flowed good even though it read like a book
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i enjoyed the read. structure was fucked but otherwise it was a good drop. nothing to memorable but it was a nice few bars
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