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no sympathy let me pass ...

Post by Haz »

i dont expect sympathy cry
thru rythem like symfanees i'll list
my "cheats" ripped my heart apart only thing
not occured bullits hitting me/ no presents
no sympathy .. why am i present? demons sit with
me/ angels far from close .. lifes hard you know
i wont get far think slow .. ovadose till i cant think
mo/ if i could pick a direction it would ghost
let me kno if i should jus go .. tragedys a fast
KILL i couldnt go thru life slow/ not suicidal just realistic
with thoughts if lifes fair why isnt charity hit with
whips big rappers bought?/ christmas in sorror ..
my soul the devil borrows make sure everyones gone
by tommorow/ wish i had coke to blow my mind away
like shells .. wish i had dope to control my time
my "flow rebels"/ this is the end .. i'm missin u friends
if heaven was sent .. why victumize men?/
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

hotttt.....yo lol that was hot...my fav part

not suicidal just realistic
with thoughts if lifes fair why isnt charity hit with
whips big rappers bought?/ christmas in sorror ..
my soul the devil borrows make sure everyones gone
by tommorow

feelin that like woah...lila dvice 2 u if u really want like emphasis on certain parts type it different or in caps or suttin u no...but otha den dat i cant find a flaw nice poem homie n stay up n stay droppin like bird shit LOL -1-
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Post by complexity »

"The best of Bis oftenly rearrange
Moto atomic elements, with a deft intelligence
The highest professorship, my English etiquette
compels me to not say it if I can't spell it bitch" Canibus

You really need better structure man. You can message me on aim and ill help.

For someone who acts like such a retard on a regular basis you bring across some emotion. And deepness through your writing. You just need to put your words together better (a lot)

That was deep but the way you worded it killed it completely.

let me kno if i should jus go .. tragedys a fast
KILL i couldnt go thru life slow/ not suicidal just realistic
with thoughts if lifes fair why isnt charity hit with
whips big rappers bought?/ christmas in sorror ..
my soul the devil borrows make sure everyones go
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Post by Haz »

lol Aiight Den Whadds Ur Aim?
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Post by Mc-Soulja »

Damn, This Shit Was Hott
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Post by Mac »

This Shit Was Garbage Hazard lol. But Peep Your Latest Shit Look How much You've Elevated Specially With Your Structure. That's What It's All About Homie. Keep Droppin.
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Aiight Mac lool Big Upz ..
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