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OMG St33Z
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Just Lookin For Some FeedBack Since Pestoe Saw My Verse And Acted Like He Was "Too Busy" To Drop Cuz He Knew He Couldnt Touch My Shit...Anyways Any FeedBack Would BE Appreciated, Thanks


I'm Destined To Erase This Bitch So I Hope You Took A Couple Lessons And Some Safety Tips
Im'a "Cook N Eat'em" Like Some Grains N Grits Cuz We All Know That "Pesto" Is The "Tastiest"

He's Stressin My Amazing Spits That'll Make Him look So "Bad" I'll Turn This "Blessed One" To A "Athiest"...
I'll Test'Em As He Bravely Spits Cuz He Couldn't Be "Good Fellas" If He Played In A Martin "Scorsese Clip"...

I'm "Spittin Crazy Shit" Like "Rabies Bitch" No Doubt That I Meant This While You Attain No Interest
I'm "The Shit" You Are "Scent Less" And You Couldn't Have "Dope Lines" If You Majored As A "Chemist"

Battle Me, I Suggest It's Senseless Cuz Afterwards They'll Be "One/Won Less" Just "Check The Census"
And How The Fuck Are You "Pest The Menace" When I Highly Doubt You Could Even Beat "Dennis"

Its Time For Me TO End This And You Better Not "No Show" Just Stick To Your Lame Rhymes
Glad You Can "Save Time" Since Your Able To Wipe Your Ass And Your Nose At The Same Time!

NO WAY That This "Win Aint Mine", Only Advice I Can Give Is You Just Better Pray
"Blain" Im'a Hafta Crush Your "High Hopes" You've Got A Better Chance To "Levitate"


Bar 1)Pesto Is A Cooking Sauce
Bar 2)GoodFellas Movie Was Directed By Martin Scorsese
Bar 3)Self Explanatory
Bar 4)Dennis The Menace, Im Sure You Understand
Bar 5)His Goofy Ass Butt Chin
Bar 6)His First Name Is Blain...David Blaine Is Known For Levitating
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Re: FeedBack Plz?

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lol man... he just scared!! this shit was fire in my eyes.. like the first bar the most the comparison with the cookin sauce... hahaha...

nah he seen this and was like "shit! i cant compare, i better act all like it doesnt matter"

PUSSY lol


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Post by jayzon_black »

Steez you handled on this one, easy. I'm not surprised he didn't show, which you predicted in your flow coincidentally, nice touch. The wordplay is on, presto sauce, chemistry, the flix, good punches.
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Thanks For The Feedback, Appreciated
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