Take 'Em Yard

[Haz]

Good Shit i Seen Betta From U .. Meanin U Gotta Step Ya Shit Up Righ Now lol
But!!!!! No Doubt Dat Shitz Nice
Punches Multis .. Structure Was Straight
Fav Lines : piece stay locked like i got "tha-military-beretta"//
gotta royal flush i'm "playin-tha-cards"//keep tha tech oiled so im "sprayin-tha-bars"

[Mac]

Structure Needs Work. Wasn't Half Bad, I Just Got Done Telling Somebody That Rapping About Guns is Played Out I Can't Remember Who It Was Though.

Over All: It Rhymed, Structure Needs Work, Multies Was Ok, Aside Of The Guns I Saw A Few Other Played Out Lines, I Think You Can Do A Lot Better Though, Keep Dropping homie. Be Easy

[~Symbolikull~]

Ummm..... Honestly Kid, the whole rap to me was irrelavant and had no specific point, it had no sunbstance and lacked credibility, but we all have to start some where, right? You repeatedly repeated yourself, usin the same phrases and words thru out the whole verse. I agree wit Mac jus like the other dude he told, gunz are played out and not good rap, talkin about gunz does not make you a real hard gangsta, talkin bout gunz doesnt make you a good rapper either. But against all that, you have mad potential, with the guidence of this site you will grow and develope your skill. big ups kid, keep droppin ya shit......

[Haz]

But If U Grow Up Around A Gun Enviroment
Of Course You'll Rap About Dem N If u Deal Wid Dem N Mos Ya People Got Gunz Den No Doubt
You Rap About Somethin Off Ya Life Mos Da Time
... Deres Fake People Who rap About Gunz But
Da People Who do Rap About it Rap About it Cause They Grow in A Area Like Dat ... Gunz Do Get Played Out Dough People Can Get More Creative But ... i Dunno i Felt i Hadda Point i Needed To Make

[Mac]

I Grew Up "Around Guns" And In That Environment, Yet I Rarely Ever Rap About Guns. But If You're Gangster Enough To Rap About Guns An Shit Like That, Then Why You Online And Not Out In the Streets doing What You're Tryna Portray In Your Lyrics? The Folks That Rap About Guns On Illest Lyrics Are Fake As Fuck Straight Up. Being A Gangster Is Not Something You Glorify, You Don't Wake Up Turn on BET like "Oh I Wanna Be A Gangster" That's Something That Happens To You. So Word..

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

U Don`t Gotta Be "Gangsta" To Have a Gun ..
Wdf ..
People Could Probably Have Guns For Protection ..
Like Me ..
i ain`t Sayin` i`ma Thug ..
But i ain`t No Punk ..
So Don`t Say That "Tha People On illest That Rap about Guns are Fake" ..
Wdf U Don`t Even Know Me On a Personal Level to Speak Like That ..

[Mac]

Uh Yeah Folks On Illest That Rap About Guns, When Generally There Implying Shooting Folks, Are Fake As A Bitch. Mean While Folks That Actually Are Shooting At People, Aren't Online On Rap Sites. As Far As People With Guns For Protection, You're Right. But They Aint Bragging About It In Lyrics Either.

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

But i`m Sayin` ..
Everybody Has a Computer Now a Days ..
i Know a Few Niggas From Mah Hood That Be On This Rap Forum Shit ..
To Put Out They Talent .. & Showcase Shit ..
Wdf are U On ..
U Don`t Know Wat i Been Through Fam ..
`cus U Don`t Know Me ..
So all U Niggas Tellin` Me to Stop Rappin` Tha Way i Do ..
Can Step They Bars Up ..
& When They Can Rip Me Or Sumptin` ..
Then i`ll Listen ..
Unril Then .. i`ma Do Me ..
& i`m Doin` That Very Well ..

[Haz]

Listen ... i Dunno Maybe U Ain Frum Shiiit Dats Rapped About By Otha People Oh Well Deal Wid it Er One Go Thru Diffrent Shii .. Nigga !! If U Rap About Sum1
You Actually Killed it Can Be Used Against You ..
Common Sense U Dumb Fuck ...
n Man Guns Ain A Problem Its Whuddeva
Like i Sed People Rap Bou Dey Enviroment

[Mac]

First Of All, I Never Even Directed Anything Towards You So As Far As You Coming At Me Asking Me Asking Me Wtf I'm On Is Hypocrytical. Secondly, Nobody SaidFor You To Stop Rapping, So Stop Turning This Into Some Big Drama Queen Issue. And Thirdly, You Can't Convince Me That These Folks Aren't Fake. They've Never Prolly Even Held A Gun Let Alone Shot Somebody. Y'all Just Some Ja Rule Mini Me's, imo.

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

^^ .. U are Directin` it to Me ..
`cus Only Me, Haz & a Few Others Rap about `em On This Site ..
i`m Makin` it Out How U Puttin` it Out Fam` ..
U Think Wat U Think ..
U Don`t Know People On a Personal Level to Talk about `em ..
So all U Have to Do is Judge On Tha Lyrics & Creativity ..
Not Try & Get Complex into They Life ..

[Mac]

Agreed, I'll Think What I Want. Specially Since This Went Way Beyond What I Was Trying To Point Out. But At Least Ghost Know What's Up.