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Haz
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the paths is sparked as i walk wit a glass lit mark
confused heads Two Fingaz up meant the pass it mark/
my liver seized wit misery drinks sipped in me till i dripp the heat
feelin franco breathe im dreamin dank blow freezed my teeth/
shiverin god deliverin my homies to his place party time
gunz in my life an army mind harm me guys i'll spark this nine/
spark this dime smoke demolishes my regrets refelcted
i'm on da block coke collegin my repp is "Head-SHit" Med Scripts/
pop one like da glock pumped drop one like ya socks hung
cocked one till your flopped done box one ill how your stopped son/
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Post by Mac »

Hazard, Stop Forcing Multies Man. They Don't Make Sense. You Instead Of Getting Better Eatch Drop You Channel Your Posts, One Day It'll Be Hot, The Next You'll Flop. One Of Your Main Problems Is You're Forcing Multies. And It's Not New To You That I Can't Understand Anything You Spit But Word lol.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

i totally agree wit mac about the multies, i had this problem before, you need fillers to make your multies keep substance to them. you cant jus be like "or this rhymes, ill put it in" you have to find words or phrases that will inter link the multies and make them hit hard. im pretty good at multies, i mean most my rhymes have multies inside of multies, if you would like help wit this i could try to help you. big ups kid
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

the paths is sparked as i walk wit a glass lit mark
confused heads Two Fingaz up meant the pass it mark/

what is a glass lit mark?again i agree wit mac n ghost..u force them at times..but then again somedays it seems u just good wit em..gotta check that man..up ur vocab a bit too...no hate juz leavin feed..take it or leave it..-1-
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Glass Lit Mark ... Crack Pipe Lit ..
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

well i wudda understood that line better if u said that insteada glass u no..but i get what u sayin..juz crititsism man nobody said u gotta take it..-1-
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Na its All Good .. i Do Take it Cause its Not Somethin Bad... Im Not An Asshole Man i Appreciate Er Ones Opinion Bou My pieces ...
Good Or Bad .. No Hate !!
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