Who I am...

[jayzon_black]

Older drop, back early last year when I was starting to record...I don't like the vocal quality...too much reverb...but I like the lyrics. Check it out, leave some feedback...I'm probably going to redo this one.

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/cata- ... 23354.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/kid-i ... 23237.html

[Alvin]

First off, not a fan of the beat and talking. Speaking cancer? Ya got an ok style in this. Open lines kinda made me eh, goon to a demon. Your ambiance is a bit off. Once your switch up in rhyme scheme comes in, its a bit better. I really cant get over this beat, i just dont like it. What part of California are you from? This is ok man, i think the beat really sent me off the deep end. The whinny synth or whatever that was. the spell out name line was pretty cool, but the singing sounds like you know what you're doing but the recording quality took away from it. Not a bad drop, just not especially my style. But then again, i dont really listen to much rap. Keep dropping man, dont let the rate you get fed here discourage you. Some people only feed if your name is something, or if your helping them out in some way which in turn lets you know the feed isnt really genuine. Something that would be cool man, is jump in a cypher, we have a couple around, lets see what you sound like now. YES, AUDIO CYPHER.

[Deciple]

the rhyme scheme and the way you wrote it was nice.. i think the delivery could be improved.. maybe different effects or maybe a layer... it kinda sounded low.. but it was ight.. i will def check out others of your tracks..

[jayzon_black]

Thank you both for the feed, it's an older track and i think i'm going to redo it, flip the beat and use my improved recording setup and techniques. Panda, I'm from Sacramento, but the beat doesn't reflect the locality of things. When I was getting started into production I just did what I liked to hear and what I thought sounded interesting, not tripping off of commercialism.