Inner Thoughtz

[>Urb@n-Leg3nd<]

Had a Few Seconds 2 Spare So i Typed something up Real Quick..........

Starrin At This History of Violence From Which i Was Derived In,
Got My Mind-Bent,I Resort to Writen Force Within this Ryhme Shit//
Certain Disasters Got me Askin 2tha Government 'What Really Matterz?
MY Mentallity Trapped In Tragedy,Within these Walls Im Feelin Agany//
Actually Stop N Look At This World And U'll See Whats Really Happening,
Attacking Countries For Blood Thirst And Because Bush iz War Hungry?//
These Thoughts Is Seemingly Stinging Me immediately When Bleeding-Free,
Strapped in for the Ride of a Life-Time,No Excapeing These War Filled Memories//
Odd It Seemz But this Weed Is My Life-Line for Sanity,In this World So Damageing

[Mac]

Starrin At This History of Violence From Which i Was Derived In,
Got My Mind-Bent,I Resort to Writen Force Within this Ryhme Shit//

^^That Was Hot.

Not Too Bad Man, Your Structure Is Kind Of Hard To Follow, But Other Then That It Wasn't Too Bad. Could Be More Creative, Have a Few Multies, Vocab Was Ok. Over All Not Bad Man. Keep Droppin.

[>Urb@n-Leg3nd<]

Appreciate tha Feed Back Man ...Yea My Structure Iz Off...Improvementz are in Process

[Mac]

Always, Always Man.

[~Symbolikull~]

It seems that you were forcin some rhymes, understood that it was a key but its criticism. Ill agree wit mac, that first bar is off the hook man, you should take from that and build a hott verse out of it, big up kids

[Momeijah]

Yeah i Agree The 1st Bar Was Dope. Shit Had Some Deep inner Rhymes The Whole Way Thru, Some Lines Fell Off, Could Be Modified at Some Parts For a Dope as Hell Verse Cuz a Couple Lines Didnt Flow Well But Shit Like That Always Happens And Can Be Fixed Easily. Good Work With The inner Rhymes And Multis Just Fix The Structure (Soundwise) Peace

[>Urb@n-Leg3nd<]

Thankz for tha Feed Back Yo' I'll Keep it in Mind