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an excellence in rhyme schemes protecting the only divine thing,
the non-existance of wack rappers like hazard from residing
in this holy site where greatness flows , giving you a brain control
makin sure we've ate your soul , no separation we operate as whole
saving viral from the clutch of border control , sellin humans a dollar a soul
teachin you how farther you should follow a hoe , before you bother to bother her
and rape her to create mysteries like whos hazard's father , where finding him is
a challenge harder than finding a blind barber , even harder than complexity
tryna figure out where he's standin , sittin and imaginin that hes standin
on top of an expensive mansion , which he bought by holdin precise's
mom for ransom , which was paid by a handsome lyrical phantom,
more known as subsist , spittin more complex rhymes than an
average educated man can actually fathom , the one and only man
that deserves a whole fuckin national anthem.

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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

the topic and idea behind this was tight, but it was off a bit in places wit the flow and shit, but overall it was pretty damn sick kid, keep at it man
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by precise »

nice drop

the content and topic was great, excellent lines

good to see you improving on your multies, altho they still kinda lack, and structure needs to be worked on

still an excellent piece for sure, extremely entertaining hahaha, and your definately improving
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Yeah Man, I Agree. Definately One Of Your Better Drops, But Really All I've Seen From You Is Battle Verses. Shit's Dope Man, Good Shit.
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thanks guys
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lol Subsist Your Makin Da Mistake Of Typin
My Name Good Luck
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-.HaZarD.- wrote:lol Subsist Your Makin Da Mistake Of Typin
My Name Good Luck
OHHHHHHHHHH! Hostility!!!!
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-.HaZarD.- wrote:lol Subsist Your Makin Da Mistake Of Typin
My Name Good Luck
CATFIGHT!! ..lol
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I believe i earned the right to do so after i pinned your ass in that tourny.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

ur multis suck..but the topic was nice.. u seem to be improving... one step at a time
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