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Silent Screamz

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A Silent Scream That cannot Be Heard
a Broken Life That will Never Be Cured/
Her Beatiuful Smiled Washed away By the Tears
From The and The Pain Shes Suffered For Years/
She closes her eyes n sees his face
Her feet starts Pacen Her heart Begins to Race/
Her Brighest Dayz are Yet so Cold
as the story of her Past Remainz unTold/
She was 4 Yrs old when her Life Quickly Changed
Realizen From here on out shed Never be the same/
As the Tears began to fall from her eyes
is the day she let out her First Silent Cry/
The Pride was Taken From this Young Girl
Changes The way She sees The world/
The Girl i wrote about in this poem u see
Speakz when her Innocents was taken unwillingly/

Leave sum FeedBack lemme kno da deal
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

i like this one really deep and personal, even tho i cant really relate to it..its very easy to feel empathetic
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Post by Haz »

Good Shit Yea Was Deep ... U Should
Write More Piecez Whea U Write Stuff wit Emotion
in it Like Dis ... i Lyked All Da Onez U Dropped So Far So Keep Doin u Ma..
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C'mon ppl More feed Back lemme kno what i gotta work on
Think iM Trippin? Tie Ma Shoe...
Cant Stand me? Sit the fuck Down...
Cant Face me? Then Turn the Fuck around...

u Cant Break The Bitch That Thinkz Nothin Of u!
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

definatley felt the emotion in this one, alot of people can relate to a piece like this and feel where your coming from. It would def be cool to see more poetry from you, I like how you write
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YeaYa lol Thas whassup Thankz for the Feed Back
Think iM Trippin? Tie Ma Shoe...
Cant Stand me? Sit the fuck Down...
Cant Face me? Then Turn the Fuck around...

u Cant Break The Bitch That Thinkz Nothin Of u!
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Post by Spoof »

deep poem! it was a nice drop!

Her Beatiuful Smiled Washed away By the Tears
From The and The Pain Shes Suffered For Years/

^^^^ I like the way it flowed!
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Post by LadieHazard »

Thankz For the feed back
Think iM Trippin? Tie Ma Shoe...
Cant Stand me? Sit the fuck Down...
Cant Face me? Then Turn the Fuck around...

u Cant Break The Bitch That Thinkz Nothin Of u!
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