What U Call It?

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Feb 17, 2007 12:20 am

I hear rappers claiming this game lacks credibility,
produce less legatee then a sterile woman's fertility
but u'll remember me before life put an end to me
depressive thoughts so I drown myself in hennesee (don't know how to write that shit... lmao)
forensics be examing my body like what he do to me
walkin dead and mysterious like the death of Biggie
always talkin dead serious like they wanna bury us
people are curious, why's he diggin that grave?
till i go furious and enslave their immense rave
roll my cigar out and smoke it proudly in the open
stroll far out, I'll be back disguised as the Omen
haunt em like a norwegian version of the grudge
before I jugde on whether to slaughter their dignity
sublimininal brainwashin'll develop them to a criminal
so what's his excuse when he stands in front of God
or maybe he'll join the chorus of a gospel with the POD
I don't know, we're yet to see how his history develop
it's a mystery, but give god a kiss from me and say I'm comin

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Feb 17, 2007 12:21 am

http://illestlyrics.com/board/lady-sam- ... t3825.html
http://illestlyrics.com/board/life-2-vt3780.html
http://illestlyrics.com/board/read-and- ... t3804.html

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Mon Feb 19, 2007 11:51 pm

gotta say it's quite an impressing feedback I'm gettin..

complexity · Post by **complexity** » Tue Feb 20, 2007 5:24 am

This seemed to have a direction, I don't think you reached it though. A lot of lines that contributed towards the topic. Yet didn't make the piece any doper. 7/10. At least your trying to be creative & rapping about more then the everyday topics.

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Tue Feb 20, 2007 11:52 pm

thanks.. appreciateing someone takin time to writee me some feedback.. been gone for like 3 weeks and suddenly i'm a ghost.. but yeah, was told to try and include more creativity in my verses, so i tried.. seem like i'm walkin the right way tho..

Irate · Post by **Irate** » Wed Feb 21, 2007 6:48 am

Yeah Man, A Good Vocab. But Flow Seemed Off At Points..
PZ

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Wed Feb 21, 2007 4:04 pm

I LIKED IT THOUGHT IT FLOWED WELL TIL THE END DROPPED OFF LIKE TO SEEN MORE AT THE END BUT NICE PIECE

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Thu Feb 22, 2007 1:42 am

aiit.. good lookin out.. thanks for feedback irate and da guy

~*Blitz*~ · Post by **~*Blitz*~** » Thu Feb 22, 2007 8:38 am

nice ending, good drop woulda been straight if it was a lil longer

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Fri Feb 23, 2007 7:23 am

aaiit.. appreciate u takin time to write some feed.. yeah, could've been a lil bit longer, but felt it sorta ended where it ends.. so yeah..

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Sat Feb 24, 2007 8:55 am

haha.. ait thanx man.. apprecaite u takin time..

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