U See My Eyes?

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 10:13 am

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Words exchanged and the tension just arose
u see my eyes?ye the fire still grows
my desires on hold,as the wire unfolds (wire meanin path)
showin a way my heart can take its mold
u tryna trick me into sumthin so sick-see
is it ur way of sayin 'i dont need u,juz ur dicky?'
thats plain wrong,and when u hear that same song
that i asked u out 2,u cant tell me the pains-gone
cuz u was always mad at me n naggin me
till my heart broke and cried with agony
jesus christ she wont stop stabbin me
mentally and emotionally,damn i had it B
u no its true,souljaz never die,only get weak
so i hope u no what 2 say,when its time'ta speak...

leave sum feed Plz n thankz

MesaR · Post by **MesaR** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 11:14 am

yeah man not bad not bad
Stayed On Topic Well
Could Have Been More Complex But
Anyways Not Bad Keep It up..

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 11:18 am

thankz man..uppin

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 2:50 pm

it was aight better than the last post i read of your about love, id like to see you touch on another topic, expand your horizin, quit sympothizin about this chick and settle it or give it up bro (if its real) but you stayed on topic, kinda, it was kinda the same as the last one jus wit different words and wrote a lil diff.

SlickMex · Post by **SlickMex** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 3:26 pm

I feel ya man..it was nice..deep meanin..

~*Blitz*~ · Post by **~*Blitz*~** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 8:37 pm

Nice drop Vincey, it went together well and you stayed with it - write bout something happy next time <3 likeee puppies!

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 9:18 pm

[email protected] wow lmaoo..anyways thankz 4 the feed yall n ye ill try that Sym fa sho..thankz 4 the tipz n advice -1-

~*Blitz*~ · Post by **~*Blitz*~** » Thu Mar 01, 2007 11:30 pm

What is wrong with puppies?!

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:43 am

lol nothin i got ya idea sammy..thankz<3 -1-

complexity · Post by **complexity** » Fri Mar 02, 2007 7:09 am

"u tryna trick me into sumthin so sick-see
is it ur way of sayin 'i dont need u,juz ur dicky?'"

This was pretty straight. The flow was solid. It wasn't that creative though.

That line I quoted above totally made me want to stop reading this drop. It was awkward to say.

7/10. Keep dropping though. The more you drop, the more you write, the more you elevate. A piece a day would be recommended.

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Fri Mar 02, 2007 8:22 am

word..thankz 4 the feed n ill def n try droppin more

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