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SlickMex
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Yea man it was a good drop..liked the similes..therafu n the surgeon one was nice..
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Post by complexity »

First line was dope.

A quite a few sketchy and played lines. Basically anytime you used a simile you were way to generic.

The whole kill you "like this, like that". Didn't do much for me.

Actually the whole drop I wasn't feeling that much.

The rhymes were decent though. You have a good grasp on structure. Now you just need to make your verses less bland.

You have made a quite a bit of progress as an emcee.

Don't get me wrong the drop wasn't horrible. Just need to get a little more creative.
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yah, first line was was your best by far, as complex said your growing up as a emmce tyin harder nice to see, this drop could be more creative but it was fine decent read good Job.
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

im throwin rocks to pay tha rent when i ride
its strictly genocide when i grab tha pencil and put tha pen aside

i dont see a need in grabbin guns
like an open heart surgeon ill just end a life while i grab a lung...

^^^ Fav parts outta the whole thing

I was feeling this, It coulda been more complex yes but it was still a nice drop. Lil diffrent then what we normally see from you but still your thing. Keep we coming! Good shit
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