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Anger flows thru me as I write this composition..
I'm a musician on a mission..
To stop the current rap tradition..
of talking about guns and ammunition..
I ain't trying to act like a politician..
or even cause the rap games demolition..
I'm just asking for recognition..
for those who are suffering from malnutriton..
and when the time arrives..
and rappers stop rhyming about stabbing people with knives..
I don't mean to criticize..
But while you in your Bentley people are struggling for there lives..
That ain't even the most serious part..
Rappers are glorifying violence that's horrifyingly dark..
Rapping can be a fine art of the heart..
But we all just gotta restart, and find meaningful music and not be a slave to the charts..
And I'm not trying to get a name, not trying to get acclaim..
I'm just aiming to take a flame, back into the rap game..
Hopefully my message is getting across,
My words are at-a-loss, wishing people not to think I'm a saviour with my own cross..
And as I write this lyrical essay..
I put my words on display, praying the game will no longer portryay a life's dismay..
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

rhyme scheme was simple, but it worked. Nice message behind it, wasnt worded the best, structure was all over the place, so in turn the flow was choppy and all over the place, this verse really didnt have much to it, overall 5.5/10
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by RH1NO »

But we all just gotta restart, and find meaningful music and not be a slave to the charts..

^^ nice line overall decent drop pretty basic .opportunity for a lot of improvement on this idea though stay up
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

why all the frikin dots?!

I as well liked the message that came across in this piece. It was simple and choppy but it still held its own. You have alot of potential and you should drop more, keep @ it...good job
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I think the dots r sexi..lol..Thanx for the feed..
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