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Torment Meets Struggle

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Flip-n-reverse-this so I'm actually ripping-verses
With dead weight like lifting-hearses at the hospital stripping-nurses
Smoke makes addiction-worthless like a-fiction-purpose
That would make a-christian-nervous like a-diss-in-curses
I bet I have ya missing-churches on-distant-searches as your condition-worsens
Now we have deficient-persons Sam leaves risking-urges comes back with sufficient-surges
Like an electrian thats my next-mission those bitching-deserve-this from the lyrical technician

You need to stop-the-lies I got-the-rhymes to shock-ya-eyes and monopolize
Get in my way it will cost-ya-lives as your face gets slashed across-with-knifes
Watch the lost-myth-rise like a godess-tries with guns and office-supplies
I carry the hottest-nines, I dont care about this novice-lines, So SHUT the fuck up!! Like scottish-mimes
All-this-time I been trying to split-ur-spine while I rip-ur-mind than hit-rewind after leave this shit-behind, I make history-mine!!

They pay-her-to-write knifes in her fingers she is (craven)-to-fight shining bright like a ray-in-the-light
She is not playing-tonight stupid fucks saying-you-tight but they aint saving-you-right? I can turn a-blade-into-spikes
Or verses we can trade-in-thru-micz you thought-I-left, They thought-I-quit now im back n your in for a lot-of-shit!

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Post by complexity »

um...interesting

You wrote this?
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Post by B-Bear »

impressing.. gotta say.. some really tight multies.. although structure was horrible it had some good flow (a bit choppy at some parts)

the first verse was great, but u messed up a bit with the last line, it sorta ruined a bit in my opinion, when u changed rhymes.. woulda been terrific if u'd just kept on with the same rhymes..

but gotta ask like plex did, considering what u've written before.. did u write this? no offence, but kinda skeptical.. but if u rote it, there's some maad elevation in ya work..
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Post by complexity »

Its true though. It just seems so much like Ekoms.
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yeah it was a good drop it does seem like ekoms style.
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drop a link
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Post by Viral »

im sorry...but i know how my cousin writes..and this couldnt be anymore like it....so till then...ima go wit u not writing this..and him writing it for you...until u personally prove to me on MSN or AIM that u can write bars like that....
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Post by drunken jesus »

um



hate to rain on this parade but
























eminem, big pun, big l, kool g rap, big daddy kane, rakim, even nas & jay-z were writing multis back in '96, is it hard to believe 11 years later people actually learned how to use the same rhyme scheme people were using back then
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by drunken jesus »

EDIT: i just saw her refer to herself as smoke


yeah she didn't write this
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by Viral »

drunken jesus wrote:EDIT: i just saw her refer to herself as smoke


yeah she didn't write this


lol....DUH!
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

lol she didn't refer herself as smoke.. wasn't talkin about be..dunno if she wrote it or not... the only thing similar to this and my shit is the multis although mines r way better...YESSUHHH... good shit tho
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Post by drunken jesus »

yeah i read that again, it was a crack reference or something

kids its not that hard to believe she wrote this it was cool but babbling with multis really ain't that hard, cam'ron does it consistantly every album

once you learn the basics of multis all you need is a decent vocabulary to rhyme as many syllables as you want to
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by drunken jesus »

i get computers puting the hootchies hootching
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by complexity »

APRIL FOOLS!

Seeing that the few fags, who actually knew about it had to blabber to everyone including Ekoms, I will reveal the truth.

I couldn't imagine if you dumbasses got busted for something. You would rat people out so quick. Lol

It was simply an April Fools to make it look like Ekoms was ghost writing for Blitz.

I actually wrote it.

I just had Blitz drop it and everyone would be like WTF, she doesn't write like that.

Than Ekoms would come on and completely deny it even though it included his name.

I wasn't implying its better than anything she has wrote before. Just that it was Ekoms that was
ghost writing for her.

Apparently it was kinda successful. Tricked a few people!

Obviously I couldn't 100% replicate his style. I just attempted to do a few things that I know ekoms does to make it seem like he wrote it.
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Post by Viral »

it couldnt have been more obvious that she didnt write it....i mean honestly....lol come on....one day shes got this style the next shes got multis flying out her ass like no tomorrow?....not like that...lol maybe half assed multis...lol
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