Bad Bitch. (story)

[Street Pharmacist]

lol this is a little story i wrote last night,its fun too read,give me feed back onn this please.

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Yo i was chillin in the club,i seened this bad bitch she was more then a dime she was a dub
and damn man i think im falling in love,i felt like going over there n giving her kisses n hugs
so i started stunttin throwin benji's in the air like it was nothing,she was just standin
acting like she was fronting,she gave my watch a stare,and she started fixing her hair
so i walk too her i spit the g and tryed too tlk too her,the way she smiled at me was killing me
thats how i knew she was feeling me
i whispered in her ear, ''yo ma you wanna get together n get up outta here'' she said yea i dont care
just tell me whos dick i gotta suck and where
she barely let me speak,and she introduced herself too me as a freak,her name was alexus
i took the bitch over too my lexus,she was horny n wet and wanted me too sex it
we both hoped in the whip,and half way too my crib she started sucking my dick,shit
this bitch gotta stay over the weekend,cuz as soon as we got there we started smokin n drinking
till we was tweaking,next thing u know we was both butt naked freaking,under the sheets all
night i was Beat'n,i passed out,then i heard the alarm clock beeping,i woke up i didnt even know i
was sleeping
the bitch wasnt by my side,now im paranoid cuz i dont know wheres the slide
i looked every where but the ho wasnt in the house,she had wrecked everything
and stole the money under the couch
there was a white letter laying on the table,next too the cable,but knowin what this bitch did to me
i felt disabled,i picked it up and it said....

''im sorry baby for what i did too your crib,but a girl is hungry plus i need too feed 2 kids
and i seened u throwin up that bread,thats the main reason i left the club with u and gave u that head
and let u go between my legs,but i left u a plate with bacon and eggs,so dont be mad
i needed food in my freezer and by the time u done reading this i would of been spent ur visa''

now im fucked cuz i dont even remember the bitchis name,all i wanted was some fucking brain
thats why i let it rain in the club like lil wayne,i aint know the bitch was gonna end up robbing me
she must of knew i had money like the lottery,she took my credit card and went on a shopping spree
i guess that pussy wasnt for free..thats some sad shit,i got robed by a bad bitch,that sucked mad dick
thats why i say nobody got no freinds,now i gotta stack that paper and do it all over again.
but i gotta be patient,all i could do is smoke a blunt n laugh at the situation.

[Spoof]

haha yo this was a funny drop and I guess there's a lil lesson in it as well..? Nice story telling but the structure could've been a bit clearer. Flow and vocab were ok.
My fav part:
this bitch gotta stay over the weekend,cuz as soon as we got there we started smokin n drinking
till we was tweaking,next thing u know we was both butt naked freaking,under the sheets all
night i was Beat'n,i passed out,then i heard the alarm clock beeping,i woke up i didnt even know i
was sleeping

keep dropping!

[Street Pharmacist]

yea good looks wit da Fb,i kept it simple and short i wasnt tryna get so complex wit da story

[-TraMaTiK-]

nice shit man..reminds me of the one i did a long time ago..lol nice doe props -1-

[drunken jesus]

it was bad,... bitch

[Street Pharmacist]

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