A Random Drop..

[~*Blitz*~]

hmm....

Short...you should add to this, It could be a very solid piece with some more length

I liked it, I liked what you were saying but I think you coulda been a lil more complex with it. You still got what you were thinking out in a strong way, some of the content was kinda creepy? or just weird lol but nice drop doooood

[16 Micz]

yea..i agree some pretty solid shit...you did could with the "descriptive" writing,and your multis were pretty good..the flow was ok...it was a short piece so..it flowed well throughout the whole thing..

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i just thought id embrace ya with some thoughts i had
this is why i grabbed a pen and bought tha pad...

its sick tha way i paint pictures on tha scriptures page
i must be a beast tha way i flip tha mage
its like i continue to write shit for days
while i approach tha pad in mystic ways
im a knight comin from a different age

flow and multis on that was nice....keep it up and thanks for the feedback on my drop...

[complexity]

"you did could with the "descriptive" writing,and"

Exactly.

Sorta..

[16 Micz]

good***