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Load up the cameras, take a picture, cock the hammers
I'm flipping scriptures, and chopping rocks up
That's whiter than Colonel Sanders, til im locked up
I'm holding Mic's with a tight grip
Expressing what I've seen in this life, shit
I remain righteous, but some lives are priceless
I remain restless, life is how I express is
Each verse got a different reference towards a drug investment
I spit that shit that leave your lungs breathless
Each breathe you try 2 take hurt u to breathe
This life is hard I pray to God I get work release
I want my fam close so I don't desert my seeds
Steadily, mad drug pedaling, but I'm only 15
I got a bright future ahead of me, I'm the only cat
That's not washed up like Metairie, I'm still being brought up
I'm fin 2 keep rappin till I'm an old veteran
Or till I end up in an endless pit, At least then
I'll be away from all this nose medicine
I can't keep a problem with out expressing it
I'm tha…Mic holder, holding Mic's
Till my rhymes reach a closure, like an odor
I hit your senses, I'mma keep rhyming till I see them Benzes

WHAT its GUTTA boyyyyyyyyyyyy

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Post by RH1NO »

Before posting a new topic, you MUST reply to ATLEAST one other topic and leave feed. And put that link in your new thread. And dont just leave feed like 'thats dope.' You want feed on your stuff, and so does everyone else. This will make sure you get some feed.

and this will be inforced. If you dont have a link I will lock your thread. I will reopen your thread when you pm me the link.

this is not difficult or very time consuming, and it will help the level of feed and activity.

this includes everyone, admins are NOT excluded. set an example.




Ok ill try explaining the term "vote link" , which is something you need to include in every new verse you submit in 'The Scriptures'. If you cant understand this , then i quote drunken jesus "You're a fuckin idiot"(or somethin like that).
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yo i put in a link
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yo how i get a picture on here?
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up at the top where it says welcome n then ya name... click ya name then you can browse fa pics to ya avatar
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

wasnt that great actually... you had some nice lines here and there, but on the most part the rhyme scheme was all off, and there were stretches of 3 lines where it didnt rhyme or make too much sense..

"I remain restless, life is how I express it
Each verse got a different reference towards a drug investment"

^^prolly the highlight of your verse, and it wasnt that great, jus another line about sellin drugs..but it was worded pretty nice..

keep droppin
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Post by Gutta »

thanx fod da feed ^^ ill work on it
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Post by complexity »

The rhyme scheme was a little sporadic. I still followed it though.
Load up the cameras, take a picture, cock the hammers
I'm flipping scriptures, and chopping rocks up
That's whiter than Colonel Sanders, til im locked up
I'm holding Mic's with a tight grip
Expressing what I've seen in this life, shit
I remain righteous, but some lives are priceless
I remain restless, life is how I express is
Each verse got a different reference towards a drug investment
I thought that whole part was pretty good.

The entire concept of the flow could have been more organized though. Overall 8/10.
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Post by Gutta »

^^^^thanks it wasnt my best
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

you gave that an 8 Plex, your smokin crack or somethin... No Offence gutta.

but Plex you give ppl that are 10X better then him less wit better verses, this verse was not put together well at all..


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Post by complexity »

I was in a good mood?

Feel like getting pointless posts deleted? It's my opinion.

Apparently you find my opinion to be very important.

You ever also think, that I rate on their abilities.

Nvm...I just implied an impossibility.
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yo i got a better one^^^ so u should check that out. plus yall im only 15 wat r u guys like 25 or summthin????
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Post by complexity »

Gutta, your not bad, don't mind him, he doesn't have to many good moods.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

lmao 25? ... im only 18 ... and sequence is 13.... age doesn't have "much" to do with it...n e ways overall it was better than i expected.. but nothing impressive...u seem to have the ability to write multis unlike some people...other than that it was pretty good for a beginner...


(see.. i can be nice...)


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Post by Gutta »

yo ive been tryin ta tell yall i hav a betta verse on here i was tryin ta get some feed on it cuz i took alot mo time on it
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