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Explicit Exhibit (Domino & Complexity)

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Complex - Red
Domino - Blue

Direct complex its wreckless yall wreck-LESS,
our strings of multis connect like a necklace
in effect yall are suspect who will we bust next
construct text that will destruct n crush vets
than the crushed vets get slashed with knifes
from the chest up, right! we cut their lives in half
death lies inside our raps, when we spit the best stuff
and domizzle will of course provide the gatz


This Cat-is-Right, im Hoping For This Night-To-Last
So i Can Attack And Stab-On-Sight My Victims in a Frightening-Mask
im Livin-Hard Like a Starved-Pigeon, So Expect To Find ur Car-Missin
i'm Spittin-Bars But When im Not i Really Like To Carve-Kittens
Or StarFishin! i Like To Rub Their Bellies With My Charred-Mittens
Before Eating Them With Liquid-Tar in My Large-Kitchen
So ill Change-The-Scheme i Seem-Deranged, 'He's-insane!'
i'll Chase-The-Dream, But 1st ill Eat-a-Plate Of Cheese-And-Cake, Skeet-And-Brains


brains get beat in, I may just stay, play, then eat them
emcees I make them lay in semon while im still creaming
my kills even with the rest of my foes, yet i have the best of the flows
having sex with a hose, im wet as jets, and i have her the breast in my hold
each session goes down iller than the last I suppose
im smashing the rows of fans who are laughing at shows
this is no joke, i dont play, Ill kill fans even STAN with a verbal array
planned in a way to murder slow with a gun in my hand, curtains closed


i Murder-Flows And Piss On Clean-Windows Of Limosuines
This Year i've Left Three-Widows With Chlamydia And Missin-Teeth
Fisting u With a Boxing Glove On ur Parents-Bed 'Let-it-Rain!'
Pussy Juice, Let it Bathe-My-Head, Legs-And-Face
Then ill Run-The-Streets And Skeet-On-Moms, Leave-Them-Stunned, Greasy-Cum!
Hide Underneath a Bus-Stop, Just in Case The Cops-Come
Tried To Run And i Got Caught, And Spent The Night Locked-Up, it's Not-Fun!


fun its not cum spots all over my clean sheets these beats mean
so I speak with evil through lacerated gums, the streets are dumb
we run from none, keep the heat under the tongue, and one hundred
and one guns, while beating our dicks to the sound of the drum
masturbating until our cums on your lips risking getting syphilis
when i spit from my dick its the sickest shit since my lungs
which are burned out from cigarettes, im to young to die, but this it is
its time to admit me in a hospital clinic, in one minute if possible?



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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

i HATE the reverse multies..ewww
it just throws it off to me
lol plexie u dont have cum spots on ur clean sheets
dont lie!
i liked it overall..even tho i dont like the reverse multies on domino's part
the lyrics are hott
and plexie urs is ill as well..
this is definitely up for best 'written' haha of the week
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Post by Lawgix »

good job guys... liked the reverse multies in there went really well... good job
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I thought this was horrible... You guys need to place more focus on content and less focus on multi-syllabic rhymes...

My victims in a frightening mask...?

Carve kittens or starfishin...? Charred mittens...?!?

Domino, there's a line between crazy and just plain inane and you definitely crossed it.

If rhymes like these are supposed to be about how good you are, then make them about how good you are. When every other line is about stabbing or shooting or slashing or cum (wtf?), then it stops being about how good you are and it starts talking about how crazy you are. Multi-syllabic rhymes don't make any of that stuff any better.
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Lmao, Thanks For The Feed Man. it Was a Spur Of The Moment Thing Just Rappin About... Anythin To Test Out The Reverse Multis. Thanks For Telling Me i Crossed The Line Between Crazy And insane Though, Good To Know My Work is Still Noticed Haha.
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Post by complexity »

Thanks for the feedback it was definitely warranted. This was definitely a cypher of nonsense.
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Domino wrote:Lmao, Thanks For The Feed Man. it Was a Spur Of The Moment Thing Just Rappin About... Anythin To Test Out The Reverse Multis. Thanks For Telling Me i Crossed The Line Between Crazy And insane Though, Good To Know My Work is Still Noticed Haha.
Not insane, inane. Two different things.
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Fuck, i Thought He Typo'd Lol.
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Domino wrote:Fuck, i Thought He Typo'd Lol.
Not to be conceited, but if you ever see me make a typo, I suggest you call me out on it and shove some pwnage down my throat. Because I'll sit here all day and call 'em out. English has been a pastime of mine for years and I'm a little smug about it. You see me make a mistake, bust my balls about it. It's only fair. :)

But back to the topic... The two of you have skills, there's no question about that... 'Plex, I read your collaboration with 'Quinn earlier and it was nice. I feel that you get too caught up in multis to stay on topic or to even make sense some times. I think it would be great practice for you to come up with a topic and do a piece on it. Don't focus so much on how many syllables rhyme, rather concentrate on staying the course and making everything flow smoothly.

Domino, I think you should try the same thing. Don't come up with a stupid topic of happiness like kitten running through a field of dandelions. Certainly, make the topic accessible through you, but stay the course. Hell, for that matter, if you want to talk about slashing and stabbing, then do it. But stay on the topic all the way through and keep the flow as smooth as possible. When you finagle that, you'll see how multis come more naturally and will actually enhance the smoothness of your flow.
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But back to the topic... The two of you have skills, there's no question about that... 'Plex, I read your collaboration with 'Quinn earlier and it was nice. I feel that you get too caught up in multis to stay on topic or to even make sense some times. I think it would be great practice for you to come up with a topic and do a piece on it. Don't focus so much on how many syllables rhyme, rather concentrate on staying the course and making everything flow smoothly.
Word. I usually get the complete opposite. I can actually imagine people shaking their heads as they read that.

I really don't know how many of my pieces you have read that have actually been topicals though. Basically everything you left feedback on was a random piece.
I think it would be great practice for you to come up with a topic and do a piece on it.
Actually one of the main reasons, I don't do topical pieces is because people were getting bored of them and wanted to see a more funny, random side of me.

I'm not trying to come off like I'm to good for feedback. I appreciate the constructive criticism, judging by your previous feedback and writings, I know I could learn a lot from you.
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