It's mE!!! (Today its the day i've been rapping for 1 year!)

[T-Stylez]

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Ok i've been rapping for 1 year exactly 2day lol!! I wrote a new spit... and imma be more active from NOW on lol

when I wake-here, I be Like shakespeare cuz i make-fear
Drama In poetic-visions, That's me cracking, i break-here
athletic-missions will get Shit-chasing while i spit-blazing
Haters-stalking, i'm jumping high, son i'll get it-raising
like dictators-talking i get-the-attention while i set-detention
Banning 2 complicated, make me hated, i just spit-suspension
If i start-flowing is it Hard-going or does a man live-on-luck
Shit, Controversy, problems and who still doesnt give-a-fuck
Welcome to t-stylez, it are only hits-g m0therfucker It's-me!!!!
i'm A true son-of-a-bitch so will i ever be one-with-the-rich
Driving-wise while im arriving-nice in a phantom at the villa
Vision bigger then a bill-board and a thrill-lord like godzilla

Thanks 4 ya'll feed... and give real feed not like,... u should write 8 bars cuz that doesnt help my raps really

[MesaR]

You Should Write Eight Bars..

Shit Was Pretty Solid..

Must Of Seemed Good, Some Was Abit Eh..lol
Multis were on poiint flow was good..
Dope For One Year, Congrats.. Laters 1

[Ambiguous Realm]

some of the multis u tried to make there didn't fit so well like "it-raising".. the flow seemed a bit off butmaybe it was just the way i read it.. just woke up so i'm a bit tired reguardless, but overall i felt u could've done better.. atleast i dont think this is one of ur better pieces so far

[T-Stylez]

Cool thanks

[BigP]

Good Shit Man.

[T-Stylez]

Thanks dude

[complexity]

Probably your best piece as of yet.

You're wordplay definitely needs some work.

"Banning 2 complicated, make me hated, i just spit-suspension"

Word association and playing with words like that is a great thing but it can be a demon
if it doesn't make sense.

People don't spit suspension.

"Driving-wise while im arriving-nice in a phantom at the villa
Vision bigger then a bill-board and a thrill-lord like godzilla"

This wasn't a horrible simile but just like the last bar I quoted.
People don't say thrill lord, its not a common saying or anything.

Overall: 6/10, one year in, eh? not horrible but not good either.

[T-Stylez]

Thanks alot for ya'll feed it will definitly help me and chea 1 year ... i've had some times i didnt rap 4 a while... some times i rapped ALOT.... havent improved alot lately tho