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Lawgix
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B-Bear wrote:no problem, always appreciate some good feedback..!!

no offence man, but i'm just so fuckin tired of readin verses like yours.. i wanna do this and that, i dream about this and that, look at misrable me and my life.. i want to read somthin else.. that's all.. but since i've first started wrtitin i might as well give u someethin to work on..

structure gotta be more consistent, flow was choppy.. lackin creativity.. sorta heard everything before, understand what i mean.. thinkin outside the box is good.. try concentrating on a topic next time, do some thinkin around that topic, some clever shit.. and put that in your verse.. that's my advice.. then u'd prolly get more feed as well.. that's somethin this site is lackin, people givin feedback!!
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Lawgix wrote:micz ... u should start chargin for beats man for real...
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by Dead Silence »

Thanks for the feed back b-bear

i think imma just tweak up the verse u no and get sum help with it but trust me this is not a completed song yet still got A LOT! of work to do on it. so more feed on how to make it better would help ever so much :-D
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Post by Young K »

the beats great...
you could probably do some damage 2 this...
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Post by Dead Silence »

thanks for the feed i got a sampl up in teh creation chamber it aint all that great tho
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